It was pretty good. I didn't see any major grammatical or plot problems, but a few more details would have been nice. Other than that it was a great story. Nice, short, and no excess "plot" that other writers seem to have problems with.
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Anonymous11/02/07
Great Story
Great story.
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Anonymous05/22/11
Great
I thoroughly enjoyed it. Super hot!!
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Anonymous04/20/13
Dream of mine
I would love to watch my wife get fucked like that. To top it off i would like to video it and be right there watching the entire time.
Not bad . . .
It was pretty good. I didn't see any major grammatical or plot problems, but a few more details would have been nice. Other than that it was a great story. Nice, short, and no excess "plot" that other writers seem to have problems with.
Great Story
Great story.
Great
I thoroughly enjoyed it. Super hot!!
Dream of mine
I would love to watch my wife get fucked like that. To top it off i would like to video it and be right there watching the entire time.
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