Tom and Mandy Ch. 02

Give it a chance

The writer is obviously setting up further parts, not ever story has to have sex in it every 5 seconds.

Don't stop now the possibilities seem endless

keep on trucking tenbears

The time for setting-up has long passed, now it 's just dull

First person present tense is a very difficult idiom to write in and sound credible, and the author just doesn't have the skill, so this sounds contrived and pretentious; a lackluster story told mostly through conversational dialog is very boring, but this author is so dazzled by their own brilliance they can't see that their reach far outstrips their grasp, and so they're going to keep on posting interminable droning conversations that no-one gives a fuck about. A waste of time and effort, I can't even be bothered to vote, what's the point, a low score's not going to put this talentless egomaniac off what he/she obviously believes is a magnum opus, a tour de force of sheer brilliance and magnetic attraction. It's bullshit, but idiot writer will never see that, and so he'll keep returning, as surely as a dog returns to its vomit.......

you need longer chapters

you should have combined chapter one and two together as one chapter. the best stories on this site are two or three pages long that way you can get more story out and the readers don't lose interest waiting for you to post more. so far this story started good then went downhill with this chapter due to you getting side tracked and making things too complicated remember " KISS- KEEP IT SIMPLE STUPID".

There is no such thing as "incest". It is something invented by politicians to increase their power and control over their "subjects". Most animals breed freely with little problem unless inbreeding continues for several generations. Most siblings are not much attracted to one another after the age of sexual curiosity.

Why not Australia?

I understand that Australia's laws do not forbid brother-sister relationships. Move to Australia, become citizen's there, and they can come back whenever they want.

really hot

I will never do incest but it's hot at least is with family and not with some bitch or asshole who will hurt you they should ban fags and dykes from getting married and not ban incest