You took one of the favorite themes--the teacher-pupil fantasy--and handled it quite expertly. Everything did move quickly--perhaps there was the tension of being in the classroom so that (since no one bothered to lock the door) you both could have been caught in flagrante at any moment. In future, you may wish to develop the fantasy more and extend the build-up but I found myself moving right along with you.
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You took one of the favorite themes--the teacher-pupil fantasy--and handled it quite expertly. Everything did move quickly--perhaps there was the tension of being in the classroom so that (since no one bothered to lock the door) you both could have been caught in flagrante at any moment. In future, you may wish to develop the fantasy more and extend the build-up but I found myself moving right along with you.
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