It's No Mistake

You Got A New Degree??**

Is it in SHORT-HAND- LOL

Short

and to the Point. Now that you have gotten that out of Your System. Maybe you could do a follow-up and tell the wifes side.

Excellent

Logical. Made the cheating wife realize that the mistake was continuing to make mistakes.
Fascinating

TOO Long

Hey.... 5 years is a long time to keep us hanging! Great story, well written, longer would be better but the story is nonetheless... Just right!

PULL THE BAND OFF QUICKLY

and wait for the ouchy you know is coming to subside. TK U MLJ LV NV

@ Cfrommm

why would anyone want to hear the wife's side?

Ohhhhhh...got it.

Yeah, I too must admit to wanting to hear that worthless cum-dusmpster howl, wail, and beg for mercy and forgiveness,

And howl all the louder once she realizes that there is none.

Pleasing comeback...

...so now I reckon you should keep it up. Nice little story...though too short. Thank you for writing it.

Maybe it's me?

But it seems about 25% of the story wasn't written. Could do with some extra stuffing lol thanks for sharing!

tactfully complete

Welcome back. It may have been short but it is the first I have read where the logical and unemotional point is expressed. I am sure there are many marriages that end exactly as written here. It may have been a story but it has a strong sense of reality. Bravo bravo.....I await anything more you wish to submit.
Again thank you for submitting a logical first step in a dissolution

Good, but a little to short

The dialog was very good, would have been better with a little more back ground. It was like coming in on a conversation but without knowing the history behind all of it.

Thanks for the offering.

another

sicko bites the dust

To the point.

It's an art form to express ideas succinctly. This story captures the essence of her infidelity in few words. Quite a treat.

Monolouge.

A good monologue, but a monologue.

Pretty good as . . .

. . . one form and one side of a morality tale. Standing on some of the other hilltops, and maybe even some of the valleys and looking at the same trigger events might fill the story out a little more than the one brush stroke we can see.

Yawn

Sorry, but I found this to be incredibly boring. I'm not sure what the point was in publishing this story. Actually, the word "story" is inaccurate, given its definition:

Story: an account of imaginary or real people and events told for entertainment.

There was absolutely nothing entertaining about this.

btb

which is just plain...boring.

Pretty Good Flash Story

Glad you are writing again. Also appreciate a good LW story in a sea of cucky excrement.

Strangely enough

In very much the same boat as wieliczka's story this week. Unfortunate.

I rather enjoyed

Always good for a husband to stick to his guns, especially when he is right !!!
Thanks.....and oh yes, welcome back.

Short

and to the point reply to all authors and people who consider infidelity as just a mistake like any other that can easily be forgiven and forgotten, a mistake is something you do unintentionally and turns out to be wrong and you stop and and apologize, repeating the same wrong thing again and again and plan for it is not a mistake, it is just malice.

Short, but precise and enough...

Short, but precise and enough...this story and many others could be resumed to his phrase: "my wife respects neither me nor the vows we made when we married."!! And when a man accepts cheating he looses his self-respect, and never will get again his wife's respect.

Yuk crap story

i think people who write this revenge stuff are trying to get it out of their system.
Sure you may have been hurt in the past but making a cunt out of yourself just locks you into the role of a looser for the rest of your pathetic lonely life! Got Ya! 1

Nice

Short and sweet.

Cogent and Compelling

Well done. Obviously something you have considered . I have seen this "mistake" rational issue come up time and time again among clients and friends. Another argument you might wish to take a treais "trust".

Very Profound!

As they said, short, sweet, and very profound! Get back to writing! And congrats on college!

Take two

I read through this again thinking maybe it would play better the second time.

Instead, I am that much more convinced that every critique I placed at that other story this week deserves mention here, as well. In addition to that, this story uses the absolute worst bad behavior most btb stories indulge in...turning the husband into a scenery chewing expounder of truth and everyone else in the story into silent witnesses to his profound wisdom...everyone but the author's personal stand-in incapable of thought and mostly present so that he could pause occasionally to describe their teary-eyed reactions.

Hmmm

Now that I think about it, I think the lesson to be learned from the stories in this section of the site is that every man's deepest fantasy is to have his wife mess up so completely, and so terribly, that she finally HAS to listen while he explains to her everything that is wrong about her.

Even the recon stories play to that, half the time.

Unoriginalist

Maybe, just maybe you should.read other types of stories.if you dont like this.Your dislike for.this is noted More than once I see.I get it You dont like BTB stories.Too bad.I actually thought that this had.a smidgeon of realism to it.Funny I just reread the story you posted and as.well written as it was I found the idea of.the hubby sticking around as long as he did totally unrealistic.Just two sides of the same story.No?

Not remotely interesting or profound. You can copy and paste these paragraphs into ninety percent of the btb stories on this site and only have to change the names, this is the very definition of formulaic.

The Unoriginalist is correct

The favorite BTB fantasy is of the wife standing/sitting/sprawling while the brilliant husband spews out a diatribe on fidelity, truth, justice and the American Way. He gets to ream her ass out while she passively gazes lovingly, sadly, teary-eyed and admiringly as he stands there like an Old Testament prophet lambasting her for her sins.

In real life, after about 60 seconds of his sermon, she'd be walking out the door shaking her head thinking "Thanks for reminding me of why I was fucking someone else, you pompous supercilious short-dicked under-employed ass."

You want to see real life? Read The Unoriginalist's stories. Infidelity is about PAIN. Pain for everybody. Not about fantasies of rhetoric. Just pain. Just pain. Pain enough for everybody and plenty to go around, now and forever and forever and forever, amen.

Grow the fuck up.

So

Hue and anon are really just proving my point. You two are fixating on whether the end results of the tale were what you wanted to such an extent that you assume that's my primary concern as well. It must be, right? What else is there to critique in a story, besides how it ended?

Sigh.

None of my issues are with the consequential realities for the characters, but with how the story is delivered and designed. I don't care if you burn her or stay married, but just do it well. HDK and FD had some good things to say on this earlier today.

How a story ends CAN be a part of determining it's enjoyability, but it should be one piece among many. These days, a single sentence "story" would probably score well here, so long as that sentence was "I'm leaving you for cheating on me, bitch."

Hey

"In real life, after about 60 seconds of his sermon, she'd be walking out the door shaking her head thinking "Thanks for reminding me of why I was fucking someone else, you pompous supercilious short-dicked under-employed ass."

I lol'd.

I was in fact just thinking about the previously made challenge...name ten women who admitted to being wrong. I was thinking...name ten who sat and listened while you pointed out an error...

Unoriginalist,Anon and Frontline

Question?Why would you read this if its not for you.?I dont read most of the other categories because I dont like them.Why read a BTB if its not for you?

re Last Comment

This is clearly marked cheating/consequence.Once again .Why read?

Calc, you answer your own question there. You avoid certain categories, I can't do that when one of my preferred categories is taken over by bitter, lonely men wanting to rant about dumb cunts while not giving us anything interesting, original or erotic to enjoy. In the case of this, not even a story, just some guy's Mary Sue avatar ranting in a one sided conversation.

My 2 Cents

How is this either a BTB or revenge story as suggested earlier? He found out she was having an affair. He decided not to accept it and is divorcing her. No physical harm, nothing to indicate he will leave financially destitute or even that he will expose her to friends and family. So I ask again where is the revenge or BTB? Clearly he is not a cuck so that should annoy 1/2 the audience. Another 25% may be pissed because there is no RACC. To bad as TUO said she would be out the door in 30 seconds in real life - so in real life he will not accept her shit.

Well

I see we're still arguing merits or likes solely on the basis of whether or not a story is a btb/recon/cuck piece...and therefore still missing the point completely.

Being of a certain type doesn't imbue a story with worth and more than it prevents it. What matters is how well it is delivered. It doesn't deserve automatic appreciation for being a divorce story any more than it deserves automatic dismissal for the same reason.

@ Calclover

Hey little sweetie you sound like a real Gay Ass Cutie.
Now why don't you Bend Over and drop you Pink Panties.
and ill go Right Up inside of your obviously Well Used Booty.

You can even let your Mother who is also your Lover watch.
that is while she gets Bang in all her Holes.

Now why don't you Jerk Off to it you Gay Lord!!!!!!

Agree with some of the others, but I still enjoyed it

I enjoyed this story, but I have to agree with the Unoriginalist.and the others about the realism. I know that we men would love to think that when wisdom spews from our mouths that the women folk would be so enamored that they would be made mute, but this is furthest from the truth. The women I know argue emotion, not logic.

Secondly, the fact that he was calm enough to produce a well thought out monologue in the midst of his life shattering is laughable. He is moving out and leaving his life behind, yet he is detached enough to be amused at her rants.

I do tire of the stories of the perfect, benevolent, all wise husband and the stupid, narcissistic, bumbling idiot wife who can't see past her own vagina. Though these stories may feel good because of the sense of justice that they bring, they are far from real. They are like Jet Li movies. No matter how much Kung Fu he knows, there is no way he can kick the shit out of hundreds of guys and only end up with a bloody lip. No matter how justified the husband who gets cheat on is, the bad guy does not always "get it" in the end. Real life just isn't that fair.

With all of that being said, the purpose of a story is entertainment. I was entertained by this tale so I will give it a 5.

Terminology

The term is "boy toy" not "toy boy". You have potential. Pay attention to some of the more valid criticisms, and keep writing.

Good

Short and to the point. We knew what he was doing. We knew what she had done. This is his leaving message to his wife. We understood that and so would she.

concise, direct, and complete

You kept the details to a minimum, telling us very little about the two soon to be exes. Filling in just enough to tell us she cheated and he will not accept it. ba bye.

then there are the myriad of postings. Your return has stirred up comments that are longer and more diverse than your flash story.

So, congratulations on your return and personal successes. You have accomplished much for your self, and managed to rile the posting crowd at the same time. lol

I look forward to your next submission.

So bad. I think you didn't realise

hers were tears of laughter. Why make the hubby be such an asshole?

You all know calclover is the troll that copies n pastes the "I see you haven't got anything to say about the story..." comment that appears on just about every story? Just letting you all know. 3*

cocklover cant reply right now because my dicks in his mouth

re: frontlinecaster

You can pretty much say the same about the willing cuckold stories. Aren't those the stories that turn you on? Heed on your own advice that you give others. Don't read what you don't like. Simple, isn't it?

Nice to have another Author back

Essentially it is a monologue about one sentence that wife uttered.
Personally I found it entertaining.

too long

Really this could be said in a single sentence, in response to her saying that it was a mistake and he should just get over it:

"The mistake was you thinking that I would stay married to you if you cheated on me."

Wow

Some people are really hot and bothered by this submission, I don't really know why since some of them are authors themselves and should know better. This is a FLASH story, it is short and to the point, regardless of the wife's smartness or stupidity, and regardless of the husband's wisdom or calmness, this was about the concept of cheating and extramarital affairs being a mistake or not, is it a mistake or something more of a deal breaker, in a more complete story we may find out about the reasons, the wife could have some reasons, but she still doesn't want a divorce, it happens in real life..right? a wife or a husband who cheats but doesn't want a divorce..The author here is saying that it is a deal breaker regardless of the reasons or the path that led to it, is that hard to understand?

great that you are back! Stay!

Keep writing and keep sharing what you write.
Enjoyed this.