Subway Girl Ch. 11

Another great chapter...

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading many more. Thank you sharing your story.

One small item -

Candles in a hospital room?? Open flame with Oxygen valves in every room?? NEVER. 15 inch dick is more believable. Love your stories, but working in the business, that's a no-no.

An excellent story with good characters. But, I think you had Ray over react a bit when Mom announced that Alicia was going home with the parents. It is obvious that Ray is going to have to move in with Alicia, or vice versa, but he has to work and the issue to be faced is leaving her alone without supervision. A thorny problem indeed, it will be interesting to see how you deal with it.

I wait for Saturday

To read each new chapter.

I wish I could write as well as you

This wonderful story reminds me of a similar experience I had in my early 20's, when I dated a really beautiful girl who secretly had bulimia. One night at a party I got jealous because she was flirting with a guy, and we got in a big fight. We didn't call each other the next day, or any day for some time. I'll tell the rest of the story another time.

Love this love story!

I am not picky...the ambiance...the feelings between them...love the way you are writing this!!!

Brightened my saturday

As always

Can't wait for more

I just spent the better part of my night and morning reading through the chapters and I got to say I love the story line. There have been a few moments that have been a bit unbelievable but for the most part you have been spot on. From the start Ray believed that Alicia was too good for him but in the last couple chapters you have shown that she has her short comings as well. I can't for the next chapter it has been a wonderful read.

Helplessly Hooked

No simple love story here, so much is happening with Ray and Alicia. The moment I think I am in tune, the story accelerates and the complexities of a real life fill the pages. No fantasy life in this one, gritty and real, true issues and hard decisions. It is one of those stories that reveals so much in each chapter, and in doing so brings the previous chapters into a brighter light. All this began with a hug outside the subway. Such an inventive and intuitive mind to devise this tale and bring it to us to enjoy. When I miss getting to it on Saturday, I feel lost, like a part of me is missing. So much going on here, Ray's job, the little old lady in church, the flower shop. Truly a gift to be able to assemble such a diverse group of people and make it all work. Come on Saturday I need more of this!-Kevin

exquisite , profound , perspicacious. Quintessential .

One chapter each week , should keep you current on Latest / new , searches in the romance category .
The steady drip , drip , drip , of such a stunning story will no doubt endear you to the biggest possible Audience. i am usually a bit of a Gadfly , reading a wide range of genre's on this site . SubwayGirl though elicits a diferent response from me .

please don't leave us , please keep sharing storys with us "after" you finish this one.


xxxhugsxxx

TwsitedOliver

Fan

Fantastic work on every level. I could read this series forever!

Sorry Folks, bad news

I am a little bit behind schedule! Life got in the way and I am still editing chapter 12. Please be patient with me! It is important for me to stay on schedule, but more important to get it right. DB

Eh

Add something interesting to the story line, one cheats on the other. The story is boring as hell

love it

another gem! thanks for the quality writing, can't wait for the next chapter.

Chapter 12 has been approved

Back on track for a Saturday release! Sorry for the delay, but chapter 12 will be out on Saturday 8-23.

I Learned a Lesson

This story has been a real education for me. When my daughter was a sophomore in college she got her first B. She, like her mother before her, was an A student. She talked to the prof with no luck. She cried for a week and the prof called every day to be sure she was OK. I laughed at the fuss. When in college I felt lucky to get a B. Never did get an A!

After reading this, especially Alicia's illness and then the obsession with the potential B, I realized how serious such things may be to some people. I finally understood the unhappiness of my daughter and the concern of the prof for giving her a B.

Happily my daughter survived her ordeal, has had 2 Fullbrights and got a full fellowship to a PhD at probably the best "Ivy League" type private university in the
south. She is now an associate professor at one of the best state universities in the US.

In the future I will take very seriously anyone's concern over a less than perfect grade!

Thank you, DonnaBeck.

Stepping lightly between romance and reality

As far as I can see he will have a rough life, always afraid that she will retrogress and knowing that only she can stabilize herself.

I understand how the parents feel

and their first reaction is to step in to protect their daughter. I sounds like they have located a good therapist who in turn has found a residential treatment. Add Raymond to the mix and there is a strong local support group. Combine the rents and they might survive, even in the City.