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Yet another JPB unfinished story.
but no
When I read this "since Uncle Fred pasted away." I thought that it was an accident at the glue factory, but no, it was a car accident.
I suppose it is realistic
But her just disappearing is unsatisfying. No information. Little character development. An insinuation of 'cock crazy-itis' and that is all we get.
It's finished and it's not bad, but why does this story feel like Chinese food, where I want another story 30 minutes later?
Interesting story but
Too many unresolved questions. While the ending was a good stopping point, the story begs for a sequel in which Janet's life is made clearer to us.
Finished
No, he finished that story just the way it should have been finished. This story illuminates the fact that cheaters injure more people than just their spouse. Janice cheated on her whole family. She threw them all away. In doing so, she also threw herself away too. Sad, but just. She wanted to see her kids and her grandkids, but all she got was the door. To have allowed her back into their lives would have only caused turmoil in their lives. Smart move. Good ending. Who really care's what happened to the cheater?
Good story
Ok, the pasted spelling was weird ( try passed ) but that apart it was an enjoyable read. Doesn't need another chapter, who cares about Janet, what a shitty wife & why after 30 years would she even think anyone cared about her. 4 ****
Too emotionless
I didn't like this story at all. I'm wondering why it is scored as high as it is. It seems too.......cold. I can't see a husband and daughters being this emotionless over their mother and wife abandoning them. I get that she distanced herself from her family before she bolted. But there is still a feeling of abandonment that happens when your MOTHER walks out on you. Kids still take that pretty hard, even if it is a mother that they don't like. They go through all sorts of abandonment issues and they always wonder if it was something that they could do different.
On top of it all, he seemed just as cold as his wife was. How did he not notice that she was distancing herself? The girls said that its been happening for a year, yet in the beginning of this story he said that he didn't have a clue that anything was wrong. How is that? Either he is incredibly blind or he didn't care.
Not to mention the fact that he got over her leaving in a single night. Not once did he worry that something may have happened to her. Not once did he feel hurt or betrayed. His first instinct when he didn't get the phone call was to start separating the funds. For someone who was blindsided, this was pretty proactive and calculating.
This story had a good premise, but it was so devoid of emotion that it wasn't realistic or entertaining. It was like the author didn't feel like going through the range of emotions that something like this would take, so he just wrote a skeleton story and wanted us to fill in the blanks. This author has written some decent stories in the past. This was not one of them.
Dull and dreary
My title says it all. 2*
5* Story. And JPB is attacked by the *MTB
The Moron Troll Brigade.
What's wrong, boys? Momma cut you off again? Sad.
Enjoyed it
Thanks for the offering.
Why!!!!
I thought both of the daughters wanted to know why she left them.Hell she could have been drugged and video taped having sex with these tattooed guys,then they could have blackmailed her with threats against her kids for all we know.Just to many unanswered questions for me,just can't see the daughter sending her away without those answers.
Uhhhhhh
After that long she recognized her mom?
Wow.
Overall a good if low emotional (characters) read.
Thx
As Usual...
Great Read! Thanks
Don't see the point of this story
No reason given for Janet's departure, and Frank suffers no consquences due to her leaving. Basically, nothing happens.
Jabvor and FD45 got it right.
This was flat. Daughters never question her leaving at the time but later want to know. Until they don't. Hubby never worries or seems upset about the betrayal until she might be brought back. Wife spends a year getting the kids ready for this but just walks rather than divorce and take something with her? Even her parents are abandoned.
From her side, it really sounds like something happened that made her so ashamed that she couldn't stand to stay and risk it's discovery. And she didn't think she deserved to take anything from the marriage. It just feels like there is more there than we know. Why would she do that?
One reason popped right up for me and I may sketch out the plot for it. I doubt I will share it here though. Besides the obvious rudeness of stepping into JPB's story, it would fall into LW and the reviewers here are too savage for a first attempt.
Why?
Why become clear to me...She needed a lot of cock. Only a gang could give her that. Why she returned? because when she got old, they sent her away and get a new one.
needs more
needs more fleshing out.
did she run away, or was she forced? why? to many holes.
Bob
Can you believe this Anom character? Great story again, Bob. It needs no fleshing out in my book. Why his Janet left him has no bearing on the plot.
I write here too, and believe me, Anom kicks my butt as well.
Best advice, ignore him, he's likely jealous.
You remain one of the best authors on Lit.
Corsair46
I liked it
Maybe not enough pain after Janet left or disruption from the twins. A good read and a reasonable outcome. Yes Frank could have tried 'a discrete escort service' but he would had to have been very discreet. (made that mistake myself)
Uhm
So she had 30 years of wild sexual glory and only suffered for her daughters action at the end because she needed a place to stay? Doesn't really sound to me like she got what was coming to her. I would have liked it better if she came back after just one year having realized how soulless her life had become, only to learn that she had been replaced or dismissed by everyone she counted on to love her.
OUCH!
Jess did the right thing when she didn't want anything to do with her Mother. Another good JPB story that saves a dreary day in the LW section. Glad to see Janet got what she deserved - nothing. Post some more soon Bob.
good SHORT story
JPB is always entertaning. One of the things I like most about his stories is that he makes you, the reader, think for yourself. He allows you to "flesh out" the story for yourself.
JPB - thanks for that!
I will agree that the response to Janet's disappearance was rather ho hum. Husband and daughters treat it like taking out the garbage. Messy task done. While the husband is angry her seems to be missing the "What did I do wrong" soul searching that would usually accompany such a sudden disappearance. No, he didn't deserve the grief but that's how most guys would feel.
But I liked the symmetry of the conclusion. Janet finally drags her sorry ass back and the door is slammed in her face and she disappears again. Who needs her?
I also like that hubby moved on and was very happy.
She didn´t get as she deserved...
...on the other hand, no one who knows JPB would really expect that. I got quite caught by this story and am grateful that JPB didn´t turn this one into cuckold-worship. Enormous talent and obviously a great variety. 4*
This was a Five and here's why...
Let's look at Janet, the first wife. I'm betting there was some kind of mental disorder. Feeling trapped and sick from who knows what she distances herself from her family and reality. She abandons them and her life. Any investigation into her story would be just too depressing to read. You want that kind of depression go watch 'Days of Wine and Roses' with Jack Lemon and Lee Remick, or Omar Sharif and Julie Christie in 'Dr. Zhivago'. Janet is just a bad sad story. Unless you're some kind of nut case or a psychologist just forget her. Bob left her where she belongs, 'nowheresville'.
About the husband. I thought he reacted exactly the way a man would; he went to work. He figured out what he needed to do to protect himself and his children and he did it. Then he devoted himself to his kids. He behaved responsibly. I'm proud of him. Of course he went through the whole 'loss process'. Did we need to hear it? He was a man. He kept it locked inside; bad for his physiology maybe, but good for the kids. Hubbie 'manned up'. Good for him. I know I write a lot of emotional drivel, but we just didn't need it here.
The daughters suffered. Only a fool would doubt that, but they had Jasmine, another lost and lonely sufferer. Thank god for Jasmine. Sure the girls wondered, they worried, we know they certainly cried.
If there was anyone I would have liked to have heard more about it would have been Jasmine. A long suffering widow who'd had a philandering husband who'd died while in the midst of an illicit rendezvous. She took those girls and their dad and rescued them. I bet she could tell us some things about her sick sister that would put everything in perspective. Yes, if there's anyone in Bob's story I'd want to hear more about it would be Jasmine. Her story, until she gets to be with our abandoned husband sounded absolutely heartbreaking. And what about the 'concerned' uncle. How do we know he wasn't concerned because he'd abused the runaway wife when she was a kid. Too bad, that story wouldn't see light on Literotica. What if Jasmine had rescued her sister from him?
Francis MacComber wrote a similar story about a runaway wife. His was titled 'Vigilantes'. His started off well, but got silly the closer to the end he got. Thank god Bob's story is clean and to the point. Bob's story ended with a note of sadness when Janet, the first wife reappeared after thirty years. We all expected that, and it left us feeling a little uncomfortable. Well that's Bob.
And last another comment above mine said something about the relief he felt reading a real story. He, like me, has become fatigued by the fetish driven happy cuckolds happy wantons who've deluged this genre lately. Like him, I wish they'd all go back to fetish where they belong. I'm really sick of the "oh honey let me slurp up your big bull's semen, or let me watch, please let me watch." Sick, sick, sick.
Thank you Bob. A really good, heart rending, story.
DID SHE GET WHAT SHE DESERVED?????
she got what she wanted. TK U MLJ LV NV
OK, but lacking.
1) Uncle Steve. You made a big deal of him blaming Frank, but when it turns out it was all her, nothing. Nothing from him, nothing from the neighbors that where shunning him.
2) Jess turning Janet away leaves a hole. Yeah, I know it happens in real life, but without that, you basically reduce her leaving to a MacGuffin. It’s there just to get the story going. The problem is, that’s what the story is all about, especially since she didn’t just leave him, she left everyone. She didn’t see her parent before they died. She didn’t see her grandchildren. In a story that hinges on those actions, no answer leaves a big, big hole.
Zzzzzzzzzzz
You know what was missing from this story? Eroticism. I mean, this is a website dedicated to erotic stories, right? And given that this story was submitted to Loving Wives instead of Non-Erotic, I assume it should include some type of erotic situation. Unless...people actually get off on stories of divorce and child custody.
To be fair, there was one scene with a blowjob. Unfortunatley, the woman performing the BJ stopped -- mid-sucking! -- to reveal that her husband's dick was bitten off during a BJ! Talk about a boner-killer!
I am always amazed that people get off on these stories. Please, tell us more about the divorce laws in that state! I'm almost there! Just a few more strokes!
I couldn't help but notice what else is missing from this story: any mention whatsoever that the main character in this story ever had any feelings for his wife (other than his biological need for a sperm receptacle) during their entire relationship. It's easy to see why she took off. In fact, I found myself rooting for her the more I learned about the main character!
Before I submit this comment, I'll save all of you tedious annony mice the trouble of commenting on my comment. Yes, I must be one of them queers: a cuck-cucky-chuckle who loves to slurp cum from my wife's asshole. Amiright? Man, you sure put me in my place. High-five!
I've just saved you from wasting your one comment on me. You're welcome.
Carvohi's comments are spot on!
I completely agree with his analysis. A well done story from JPB. Definitely one of Bob's best.
Short
Too short a story bob, seems like all the ones you write recently are too short
lately, it seems;
the good tales, worthy of reading, are to darn short.
only 4 stars, cause I wanted to read at least 2 more full pages. ****
hummm...
JPB is taking over the spot vacated by Papatoad?
Another straight ahead lost wife/victorious husband tale - kinda reassuring, but not going anywhere new.
Eh... now, as a reader service I think I may suggest the most obvious, but not stated, reason for the 1st wife to leave.... she got into drugs, and became a coke whore, or whatever she was using. And... she finally got old enough that she wasn't going to get support even from the most ropy of "boyfriends"... and that is why she came back.
It happens... and fills all of the empty plot slots. You can write the rest in your mind, if you must. And... you don't even need a lot of sex scenes with Dicks-Of-Unusual-Size (and the associated DOUS-bags) - just the drugs, man... and the drugs are likely used to fight the depression... the depression caused by using drugs...
Kinda depressing, actually...
YMMV.
Green-something
(bonus points for spotting literary references...)
5 Stars: I agree totally with Carvoli
Wife was obviously mentally ill, but she deserved the reaction of her daughter when she showed up 30 years after disappearing, having abandoned her husband, children and parents. They owed her nothing but a slammed door in her face. Thanks
***
Amen! Cheers!
yes, but....
She may very well have been mentally ill but her taking a year to distance herself from her children shows that she was in control of her actions.
That she could leave and have no contact with any of her family, going so far as to run from her father and have two men threaten him was enough to write her off as a total loss.
The probable reason she reappeared after 30 years was that she lost whatever she left for and had no other resources, but by then she was less likely to get help from them than a stranger.
She chose short term over long term, then outlived the short term.
Fascinating
I think the comments are more interesting than the story. I can't help but think that JPB published this story as an experiment, to see whether readers rate a story based on its quality and content, or whether they rate it based on its author and whether or not they agree with the actions of the main character. I think this answers that question definitively.
The mystery of this entire story is why the wife left. The author never tells us, so we have no choice but to invent our own reason. Carvohi suggested it was mental illness. Another suggested drugs. It's interesting that no one suggested that maybe the husband was simply an uncaring prick who never really loved her, and treated her like shit. Given his apathetic response to her disappearance, it seems easy to connect those dots.
Carvohi suggests that it simply isn't important why she left, because this story wasn't about her. It was about the husband picking up the pieces of his broken marriage and moving on. Okay, fine.
In that case, where were the husband's feelings described, or his actions explained? Where was the grieving process that everyone endures at the end of every relationship? Well, Carvohi explains, that was all done "off-camera." No need to bore us readers with the messy details.
Fair enough. What about the twin daughters and the emotional consequences of being abandoned by their mother? Again, Carvohi explains, this was all done "off-camera." No need to see that.
So, at the end of the day, what do we have? A story about a woman who leaves her family for reasons unexplained, a husband who experiences a spectrum of emotions off-camera, and two daughters who also suffer emotional consequences outside of the narration. The husband does what "any normal man would do" under that circumstance and "reacts rationally."
I'm sorry...and this is a compelling, five-star story...why?
Frontlinecaster made an excellent point recently. He suggested that readers respond to a story based not on the quality of the plot or the emotions it evokes, but solely whether they agree with the actions of the main character. Any story that includes a husband who acts "rationally" and like a "real man", and that ends in divorce, mutilation, revenge and/or death, is automatically a five-star story. Anything else is a one.
I think this story is an excellent test case for that theory, and the comments and rating speak for themselves.
More on this story...
The fact is the wife leaving was the trigger mechanism that got us to the real story; a story about a man with two girls, a lonely sister-in-law, and an uncle with his own concerns.
The fact that Janet turns up at the end simply closes the story. Whether she was a mental case as a result of childhood experiences(the uncle), getting into drugs, or any of a million different factors she was not behaving normally. She behaved abnormally; she was mentally ill. Janet is a tragic figure; there's nothing we can do for her, there's nothing there for us.
Our protagonist, Frank, had apparently watched the 'disappearance' of his wife over at least a period of a year. His reaction was typically masculine; got a problem, fix it with hard work. Doesn't get fixed? Work harder, provide more tangible wealth. Blame Marcus Aurelius, blame John Calvin; doesn't matter, it's the typical northwest European male response. When his wife does leave he turns to his children, got to protect the kids, save the accumulated wealth, guard against unfriendly intrusions, find a suitable replacement, a nanny.
The story started with a sick but aligned family, it became a family in crisis, a family out of alignment. Frank really can't fix it, but along comes Janice and things slowly become realigned. In the end she assumes the role of wife and mother and absorbs and provides the love and affection the 'sick' sister either threw away or lost, dependent on the reader's point of view. Janice is the heroine here.
If we want answers, we have to get them from Janice. Next question; what's Bob going to do? Usually he leaves the reader to fumble, grumble, and prognosticate. Janice's story now is 'the story'. She has the answers. She has her own broken marriage, and her ringside seat into all the mystery about her sister, her uncle, and the damaged family she rescues. She's the nurturer here.
What happens next? That's Bob's call. I don't know about anybody else, but gee I'd really like to find out. Right now only Bob knows. Maybe he'll let us listen in, maybe he won't.
I agree with Swingerjoe
I agree with Swingerjoe. I'm one of the earlier commenters who questioned why this story was rated so high. It seems like it is a card board cut out of a story that will get high ratings. It shows you everything at face value but gives you no depth. The fact that everyone had to GUESS why she left and make up ASSUMPTIONS on what the characters went through emotionally is a failure on the author's part.
I also find it interesting that people rated this story high and defended it despite having no idea what the characters went through. Of course we readers need to be "bothered" by the emotional details of betrayal. Why tell a story about betrayal if you aren't going to explore the feelings involved in it? It seems that if a story ends with the guy kicking the wife out, he is automatically a "real man". Here is a fact: real men also feel hurt, pissed off, and vulnerable when we are betrayed. Any guy who tells you differently needs to stop watching Clint Eastwood movies.
These characters went through NO emotions. It could have happened off camera, but what is the point not being involved in that process. That is how we connect to the character.
It seems as though people on this site are so thirsty for a BTB ending that they will take one where they can get it. I do understand being frustrated with the influx of cuckold and swinger stories. There does seem to be a serous lack of real consequence stories, or heart warming reconciliation stories. BTB stories are becoming dinosaurs. But you guys are the cure for that. If you want a story like that, write one. Stop getting angry because there aren't your type of stories up here anymore. Stop depending on the talents of others to entertain you, then get angry because they don't. There is some truth to the statement that a lot of the recent writers who are worth anything do cuckold and swinger stories. That's not their fault. That's what they enjoy. YOU pull out your keyboard and start typing stories that YOU enjoy.
Swingerjoe
Wait wait wait, is someone in the comments of this story commenting on it's lack of eroticism? What!? Why would a story on litEROTICA be erotic. This is a site for lonely, bitter old men to rant about how much they hate their ex-wives and how unjust this society is for forcing men not to leave their wives destitute and homeless in a divorce! Erotic content, sheesh, some people just expect way too much..
Why do people keep complaining about an influx of cuckold stories, when they are in the CUCKOLD SECTION OF THE SITE!
Go write your stories in non-erotic or romance or somewhere else, then guess what! Our disgusting swinging and sharing stories won't bother you, because you're not in our god damned section!
Seriously! Why are there all these fucking queer stories in Gay Male! I come here to read about monogamous, heterosexual relationships! That's what I'm in to, why can't I read about that here! It's not like I have anywhere else to go!
Just another one.!
You had a 4-5 going. A story w/out resolution is a story with out and ending. The author is to lazy to finish it, it rates a 1. Here is another one for Finishthedamstory.
Excellent story
I was rather surprised that JPB got into the begats, but he is the author, perhaps it was to permit us to feel the 30 years before Janet came out of woodwork to be swatted. Really there is nothing she could say that we could be sure about.
Nice diversion.
Good Read****
You came through again Bob. Thanks for sharing.
This really doesn't matter but...
I REALLY gotta know why the hell she bothered coming back. She left cuz she liked being a complete who really and hated her family, but why did she show her face after three decades? It simply does not compute.
It's as finished as it needs to be
The husband didn't care why his wife abandoned him and their girls. The wife's parent's cared (at least her father did), but died before they found out. Their daughters did when it happened, but by the time their runaway mother finally came to the door with suitcases in hand looking for a place to roost, they didn't care anymore either. She had become irrelevant to all their lives.
If it didn't matter to them why she ran away, why should it matter to any of us?
I appreciate the beating
The only thing Bob likes more than a man forced to suck cum out of his wife's snatch (see the contortions he makes to make sure it usually happens in a story) is for a man to beat someone up. (It's a traditional element in a Bob story....like a Mustang in a Stangstar story).
However, I like the fact that it wasn't some guy beating up a cheater. Instead the fact that the wife's actions rippled and caused other people to be affected was a nice touch. However, I would have liked to see some follow up on that.
***
FLC, if you weren't so egregiously insulting, you'd have more people sympathetic to your desires. You have a point and then you ruin it. Are you offended or are you gleeful to have something to rail against? It's hard to tell.
Swingerjoe...the pixels are almost free as is the labor. If you find a story which doesn't give you the stiffy you crave, move on to one that does. It is not as if you wasted money on a book which tricked you as to the content. Obviously the editors are more open minded than you are: they feel that there are tales of cheating wives out there which can entertain an audience which doesn't require a hand wash afterwards. And considering some of the ratings of these stories, the vast unwashed majority agrees with the editors. It is a story buffet. Instead of railing at the brussel sprouts, go find yourself some chocolate spouge...I mean mousse.
I think the point that some reviewers only care if their personal sense of morality is satisfied in their ratings is more accurate than some are comfortable with. Certainly some stories get a 5 which have little if any craft to them. It is almost as if the reviewers are unaware that there are any numbers between one and five...If I rated stories, I would give this a three. Well written and realistic but with certain elements lacking.
I'm afraid I also have to ask why this story is rated so high.
First, it has more holes than swiss cheese. She drove her daughter 20 miles to her mothers but she doesn't have a car? He beats up on the uncle so bad he puts him in the hospital in front of 2 off duty cops and they don't intervene? One they find the wife he HAS to serve her with divorce papers?
I keep thinking JPB could be a good author if he took the time but he never does. Someone called him lazy and I think they are exactly correct. This "writer" has a good following and I wonder why, I've never been able to figure it out.
Thanks
Another great BOB story
Swingerjoe and his cohorts
I am and I believe everybody else is getting tired of your whining and bitching, when i read your comments I get the feeling that you are like a jealous school girl who complains to the teacher why her friend got a higher mark than her. my dear shallow friend, this site is called Literotica, that combines literature and erotica, some stories combine both, some have only erotica and some have only literature, so if amateur writers who are writing for free wanted to write about anything then all we can do as readers is read and vote so the writers would know how their stories are received. My dear cucky friend, in your defense of the cucky life style and attack on everything that may conflict with this type of life you are no different than the bible thumpers who consider everybody who doesn't think like them as ....anyways, would you and your cohorts save us from your drivel and go and leave positive comments on the cucky stories. As for JPB, you are still the master of the loving wife genre and you have proved one more time that you can write any theme and any story line of your choosing, and i am glad that didn't write this story to piss off anybody like the last one.
Firas-
When I can see one chapter of, just to pick an example, an Xleglover story or a MM story go up without a dozen anons flooding in within hours to threaten the author and demand he stop posting, then I'll stick to only leaving positive comments. Until then, I'll continue to point out the blatant hypocracy of the BTB crowd who goes on and on about how horrible all those stories they are somehow forced to read are and then bitch when people read their stories and don't like them.
Seriously, just stop posting your BTB stories in this category. Then you won't have to read all those evil cuckold and swinging stories you hate so much, and you won't get comments from those readers. Laurel has said in the forums that this section is intended for erotic stories about unfaithful wives, go somewhere else and you won't have to read those. It's a win, win.
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