I loved it! I myself am a big fan of build ups like this. All I ask is that you be quick with the next chapters.. It's gotten to where most chapter writers will wait months to even start the next one. And by then, everyone's already forgotten about it
What's holding me back from liking it is the stepbrother. While he stands up for her, which is admirable, he also comes off as a cocky douche quite a bit too. I like the female protagonist, yet the male doesn't at this point seem to be her equal.
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Amazing!
I loved it! I myself am a big fan of build ups like this. All I ask is that you be quick with the next chapters.. It's gotten to where most chapter writers will wait months to even start the next one. And by then, everyone's already forgotten about it
Well written, yet...
What's holding me back from liking it is the stepbrother. While he stands up for her, which is admirable, he also comes off as a cocky douche quite a bit too. I like the female protagonist, yet the male doesn't at this point seem to be her equal.
Pretty well
written so far, the dialogue seems pretty natural, I only wish the chapter was a bit longer. I'm waiting for the next one.
Good story
Keep it flowing. Thanks
Tried to ltave a rating
but the button subroutine was broken. 4*. Nice characters.
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When did trains learn to yell?
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