I want to publicly thank Britease for his important commenting on this story. It will inform my future writing. The story description said: "A woman loses a bet to her cousin, and has to pay in public." On the other hand, there was nothing in the story to indicate that I pictured the protagonist as a woman. That is a serious flaw and I appreciate Britease pointing it out.
It did not take long to get into the action but details were lost which would have made it more compelling. The incest angle was a throwaway at the end. A good read and hope to see more in the future.
English
Quick & Dirty!! LOL
Lovely little scenario. It didn't need massive and distracting descriptions....What else can you conjure up??
Was this hetro or gay?
Couldn't make out whether the speaker was male or female.
Oops!
I want to publicly thank Britease for his important commenting on this story. It will inform my future writing. The story description said: "A woman loses a bet to her cousin, and has to pay in public." On the other hand, there was nothing in the story to indicate that I pictured the protagonist as a woman. That is a serious flaw and I appreciate Britease pointing it out.
Extremely well written. Outstanding, in fact.
hot
simply, straightforward and erotic, nicely done
Too Much to the Point
It did not take long to get into the action but details were lost which would have made it more compelling. The incest angle was a throwaway at the end. A good read and hope to see more in the future.
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