homeMind ControlWaiting in the DarkPublic Comments

All Comments  for

Waiting in the Dark

bySABANBURY©
All
Comments (2)
by Anonymous

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.
by Anonymous08/17/14

Bad, really Bad

Poor sentence construction. Many wrong words used which distracted the reader trying to figure out what you were writing about. Story continuity was thrown out the window, there wasn't any. Parts of the story conflicted with other parts. Try using a spelling and grammar checker before publishing online. Not even worthy of one star.

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.
by Anonymous08/22/14

Different....and good!

This was not the aspect of mind control that I envisioned. But I have always known that the greatest erogenous zone we possess is the one between our ears. Stimulate it, and the rest propels itself. It could have been a man instead of a woman, lying in wait on that bed. The result would have been the same. It's a human thing.

If the above comment contains any ads, links, or breaks Literotica rules, please report it.

Click here to leave your own comment on this submission!  or
Back to Waiting in the Dark  or
More submissions by SABANBURY.

Add a
Comment

Post a public comment on this submission (click here to send private anonymous feedback to the author instead).

Post comment as (click to select):

You may also listen to a recording of the characters.

Preview comment

Forgot your password?

Please wait

Change picture

Your current user avatar, all sizes:

Default size User Picture  Medium size User Picture  Small size User Picture  Tiny size User Picture

You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.

Select new user avatar:

   Cancel