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One Shot Short Story Ch. 01

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by ambystohlute08/17/14

Amazing idea

I loved this little tale of events. I'd love to see it for future events if you ever want to do it. I've been so greatly in love with your stories. I've reread it probably 5 times now. Iplease keep up this amazing work. Your style brings the readers in so well. You keep them interested with it, while having those small sentences that interact with us directly. It works so perfectly!!! Thanks paynebrant. :)

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by bearslady08/17/14

I think I've said it before, but don't mind saying it agin. Love your story, the storyline the multi-level characters, the humor, the sex. You blend them all together to make a fun read.

And will be trying the cookies next weekend. Sounds mega yummy

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by Edwarus08/17/14

Thank you

Wasn't really wondering but now that you posted the ingredients I've gotta try and make it an love the story cant wait for the next main chapter

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by thilltell08/18/14

3.3 lbs of Chocolate?

54oz seems like a lot of chips. I also am a believer in Quad quad batches. I only use 4 to 5 hand fulls (12-16oz) in my chocolate chips and that's more than enough for me.
Enjoying your series and like your short story idea.

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by Anonymous08/18/14

Great Job!

I literally check your page every night to see if you've posted anything new and I was so excited when I saw that you did! I noticed a few editing errors but nothing serious or even noteworthy enough to distract too much attention from the story.Overall, I really like the idea of short stories intermittently written every few main chapters; it further strengthens the emotional connection to each character. On a final note, I really enjoyed the read and once again you did a really great job! I'm eagerly looking forward to the next installment!

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by superfeluously_e08/18/14

Well Played Sir!

What are rules if you can't go over, around, and under them ;-)

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by KiwiKing08/19/14

Lovely....

simply lovely. I enjoyed this wee shorty very much. The way he's trying to teach her things we take for granted that everyone should know. I also ADORE the fact you put the cookie recipe out there. My mouth would water thinking about these divine cookies in the story. Can't wait to try them out myself. (I might even share them if people are lucky!)

5 Stars.......yet again. Waiting for the next chappie now.
Nicci

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by Rud1Girl08/19/14

Try another

First off love you work, and that you seem to be a boarder line genius with the written word. Will be trying these over the weekend - but here is another to try as well:
http://www.ladyandpups.com/2014/04/23/monday-blue-b erry-oatmeal-cookie/ apart from being an amazing food blog I like her keen observational skill as well.

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by Anonymous08/22/14

Hysterical! That made me laugh so much :)

And... um, yes the recipe looks great too!
I really love what you're doing with this story - Greg and Lucretia together do make me laugh a lot and that's always good for (human)kind!
Please keep going with this story and your off shoot minis - its making my heart glad! x

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by Cherrypeach08/28/14

Gotta love Cretia!!!

When she licked the unused bowl, I giggled. When she played in the Crisco, I cracked up. When she ate the eggs, I died laughing. When she damn near broke the mixer, I shook my head, chuckling. When she devoured the butterscotch morsels, then had the nerve to argue with him about them, I fell onto the floor laughing.

Damn, I love your stories and Cretia (my affectionate nick name for her), is adorable. Take a bow, sir. You and your writing are superb. 👍👍👏👏❤️❤️😂😂

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by Anonymous11/05/14

Fantasy Chocolate Chip -Oatmeal Cookies

This is the first batch of cookies I had to mix in a stock pot since there is no bowl big enough. They are very good. Thanks!

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by barbette_sg02/01/15

Will have to try this one of these days :) Thanks for the recipe :)

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by TruckerChick03/02/15

mmmm

I'm gonna try making those but I think I will use cranberries or dried cherries. :)

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by maxd0103/07/15

That was quite amusing and I had to snicker at both of their actions and reactions.

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