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Sphere of Chaos Ch. 03

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by fanfare08/23/14

patience

PtP, I am finding the beginning of this storyline to offer interesting bits of speculation.

Unfortunately, these short chapters are going to require some patience from your readers until the characters and their motivations have been developed enough to understand their motivations.

Also needed is some sort of background on the world of your characters and the societies they inhabit?

I am not certain but did you actually intend that last paragraph of Chapter Three to end so abruptly and incoherently?

I suspect you will need to repost this chapter if there was a technical malfunction. It is a common occurrence on this site.

Or, if that would be too problematic, you might consider including an overlap from the end of Chapter Three to the beginning of Chapter Four.

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