All Comments on 'On The Way Home'

After reading your 'He Pick The Wrong House' I decided to check you out and found this. Though it was written 3 years ago it was also an ok story. Honestly after 3 years of intermission your style hasn't change much.

I have a feeling you have a vivid imagination but were unable to express it fully. You have the plot there but just not enough steam to make it a really hot story. Try and get some help from others to develop your story IF you were serious in doing some literary work. ALSO BE CAREFUL WITH YOUR SPELLINGS! Or are you using the same broken down keyboard?

this one gave me the most reaction. AWESOME!