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by Cleardaynow08/21/14

Excellent

This I like a great deal. The restraint within it makes it so much stronger than any rant can do. It creates a persona that it is natural to empathise with. The melodic flow and progression made up of subtle images and ideas complements this to produce a truly excellent poem (in my opinion). The final four lines give a counterpoint of faint hope or longing that accents the entire poem. Well done.

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by Magnetron08/21/14

JAM said I should give you 5 Stars on this one.

I'm going to agree with him this time.

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by twelveoone08/22/14

5ed

recommended both

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