Becoming Beth

Huh?

It could perhaps stand a little polishing, but the premise is sound.
I group stories I open here in three piles: complete turnoff, pleasantly sexy, and interesting more for the story than the sex. This fell solidly in the third group, which isn't a bad thing.

This appears to be your second story on here, keep working on it, maybe get a proof reader or guinea pig, or two, for early feedback? I think you have promise, heh.

Really Anon?

Boy, I sure would like you to submit a story to show your expertise in being able to trash somebody elses work. The concept was pretty good. But of course it takes imagination. Maybe that is why you didn't get it.

Ha! Well said Grif!

Liked it

Good stuff!

very good

beautiful story.. I would only wish to be able to do the same.. watch out guys and girls.. I would be a strong sexy woman and burn through life..

Beautiful, oh to be an Annabeth rose

Xxxxxxx

Very original

beautiful heartfelt story

I myself , enjoyed the story

another chapter

Loved the story, and really would like to see another chapter or two please