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You are a hell off a writer
I can't wait to read the coming comments.
KRASH
Man, did this ever come crashing down. I thought chapter one was quite promising but this chapter is truly awful. I don't want to be unkind but this is not adult.
Hey dude you almost pulled off the impossible
I thought that it was impossible to write a second chapter that would appeal to almost everyone (there are some assholes who never like anything and give even the best work a 1), but you came damn close. The BTB crowd can hardly consider you a wimp when you got a 3 to 1 return on affairs and ruined her asshole lover. The reconciliation fans also have some solace because it looks like things just might work out.
There might not be many women who would stay married after what happened - I can't say whether or not I would because I never will have an affair and would divorce my husband immediately if he did -- but women are normally more forgiving than men are because there ego is normally not as involved.
So you walked the line between the BTB crowd and the happy ending fans about as close as humanly possible in a very original tale.
In summary, what's not to like? 5*
Remarkable
Not much to say that Amyum didn't already say.
A near perfect tightrope walk in the loving wives section, and that my friend is no easy feat. A very original story with plenty of depth and twists and character. An easy five stars.
Looking forward to more of you work.
Good Story ?
What started out as a promising good story turned into unbelievable, implausible macho bullshit.
well done
and sorry to see it come to a close. well done, well written. looking at the story from the mechanical side, well developed. the emotional side could have used some work but you could still feel the characters pain. enjoyed and well done!
5 stars
Excellent story. While I wasn't a fan of the 3 to 1 revenge, I understood his reasoning. Also, a happy ending always makes me happy.
I do like how realistic the recovery was. It wasn't instantaneous like most reconciliation stories are. It was still an ongoing process at the end of the story. A declaration of love does not wipe out a betrayal. Forgiveness of a betrayal doesn't happen in a single moment of clarity. It is usually a daily commitment that has to be made until the pain is a memory.
Well done.
Not a true BTB story but a got my own back. Could have gone both ways and still has the potential of a third chapter if the author feels the need.
Great story
So sick of the wimpy gay married crap posted on Loving Wifes. Hope some makes a gay cuck area soon. Loved your story
Who will write this type story??????
I am curiouse of that when an Author will write a story among the very few story type.
A cheating wife and a reconciliation (may be for the sake of the kids) and 5-10-15 year later the husband leaves the wife for another (younger, better etc..) woman.
This type is VERY-VERY-VERY rarly. WHY do not the consequence author try?
Duna
Fantastic revenge
I like what David did. And I understand why he did it, there was no way he could stay married to her and compete with her memories of a 'big cock' and all the nasty things she did with another man.
But sometimes love isn't enough and its best for all to leave the pain and hurt behind.
I have been waiting impatiently for this one
And thank you for having finished it in a timely manner.
Well written, seems realistic, didn't notice any errors, so that is three stars right there.
Did I like or love this story? I loved it.
So five stars.
I'm a touch surprised she didn't detect any of this herself, but it's the one 'Get out of jail' free card. I'll buy it as the results of her guilt. I am not sure I bought all of his reasoning, but it was real to him and I can see HIS logic. On reconsideration, it isn't a bad analogy at all.
Thank you and keep writing. Liked it much more than Burning Bridges. I also liked this better than your other tale, but I consider that second better than Bridges.
Your inclusion of a pries of Brownwood suggests you are going to try a geographic story arc ala Rhenquist and DQS. I welcome such fare. It allows the consistent readers a chance to revisit favorite characters. Because stories never really end...the writer just stops writing.
great
i dont think he cheated. how can you break something (his vows) that are already broken. once your spouse breaks their vows and if you want to stay married, then fine thats your personal call. but dont say that what he did was as bad as what she did. it wasnt. although cheating can be very subjective. are we talking an affair, or a one time drunken mistake. hell i got friends that consider their wife dancing to close to another man cheating. i also know people that dont mind their wife openly flirting with other men.
great job
Not a RAAC, but a plausible "tear it all down and start again" that shared the burden well between the husband and wife. And I appreciated the ironic symmetry of her also having to "put this behind her" even as she and the counselor asked him to. His actions were neither childish nor spiteful.
Great Story
This was just the right length, timely conclusion and a well thought out storyline...an enjoyable read. After reading this I read all your Literotica stories...I hope you continue to make contributions...thanks for a great story.
Interesting conclusion
The three revenge affairs are a taxonomy of your analysis of the damage to marriage (or the marriage in the story) due to the affair... and the hesitancy of the third affair (the "love" affair) was well done.
I earlier suggested that I didn't think the length of the second part was going to be long enough. I'm surprised with what you accomplished with the space you used. By putting the revenge affairs in the past you could use description rather than narration to convey your points, at the cost of the immediacy of narration. By stacking the revenge in this way, the response of the protagonist could be compressed as well - again, unfortunately at a cost in intensity.
The conspiring between Mark and the protagonist was not addressed - sweeping under the rug that part makes the trust issue unresolved as well. While the trust issue - the "must give up on hedge funds" - point was well made at the conclusion, it wasn't strongly supported in the body.
So, the story was moved a bit from the dramatic to the didactic. Still, very good... my comments are more to sketch what I see as the compromises made to get the piece out. Honestly, I'm having a hard time finding time and energy for a little flash piece I have in mind, so I'm not being superior here.
5 stars for this one from me. Your previous stuff I would not grade as highly - I see improvement. Good show!
Green-something
Fine job!!
An excellent story of marital strife with a plausible resolution. David tore the rest of the marriage down in hopes of rebuilding on level ground. I liked how you equated the four years afterwards as a second affair. That argument and logic were sound. Her comment regarding cow chips made me laugh, but she was so right.
The only improbability was him having affairs with three different types of women, young, experienced, and passionate. A bit of a stretch, but so what. Her clueless to his affairs was perfection.
Since this is the opening story to the "Brownwood" series, I am curious if we will learn if they survive after the children moved out. Did the sins of the past become a memory or the sharpened nails of their final coffin?
A poignantly well crafted tale. I look forward to more. Your plots are refreshing.
Thank you,
M1*****
story
very well written story. it shows how fragile a marriage actually is and how trust plays a major role in it. not talking in a marriage will destroy it in time usually
Good but...
It is true that two wrongs do not make a right. What she did ended their marriage. With the marriage over except for the paperwork, he was free to do as he pleased. You see, she changed the rules with her arrogant affair. Arrogant because she thought she was hot shit and could live beyond the rules and her husband would be too stupid to find out. In reality, all she did was to debase herself and smear herself and her family with dishonor. What he did was what a lot of people do after a failed relationship, they search for the self they lost, for the intimacy they lost and for the love they lost. Married in name only, they were not truly married. It is kind of the opposite of two people living together in a common law relationship, not married on paper but married all the same! Infidelity is a lethal bomb in a relationship. It ALWAYS kills a marriage or other relationship. The two people may continue to coexist but the marriage is DEAD. He gave her a second chance without having to go through the divorce, damage to the kids, reconciliation and remarriage scenario. For an arrogant slut, that is more than she deserves and the least she can do for the kids. Meanwhile, David is sacrificing years more of his life to stay with a piece of shit and turning down the potential that he found in Ann Marie.
small surprise
In the beginning of the first chapter she mentions Mark wanting to resume their affair, it is a small surprise that it is never mentioned by David.
She had broken the marriage, so was what David did really cheating?
A broken contract is no longer binding.
This is a more plausible reconciliation than many here, it is not a case of negotiating from weakness or blanket forgiveness for the unforgivable.
Well done.
Second Affair
I agree with hubby's remark that her not at least transferring out of Mark's area, if not leaving the job completely is like a second affair.
Well done.
A reconciliation I did not think was possible.
Not a plausible solution at all
Not a plausible solution at all. The story should not have ended as a reconcillation but in a divorce. I have nothing against reconcillation when warranted and believable (I’m not Harry in VA). But this wasn’t a believable plot. In a way this is a RAAC story, but then from the perspective of the wife.
Who is morally the worst person? A woman who has one affair lasting a total of four weeks but is remorseful about it, bever confesses to her husband but tries to be the best wife she can in the following years? Or a man who –in revenge for her betrayal – secretely has three affairs lasting over many years…
I’d say the latter betrayal is far worse because it was both spiteful and premeditated. Two wrongs doesn’t make a right. I am not giving the cheating wife a free pass but if he thought it to be too difficult to stomach the fact she had an affair and reconcile via an other way, he should have confronted her and divorced her. The way he acted would never work in real life. She torched the marriage putting it on lifesupport but he drove a stake through it, burned it and then shoved the ashes in a dumpster.
In all turns he has shown himself to be the the ultimate hypocrite. Firstly over a long term he has muliple revenge affairs. Secondly his remark that her not at least transferring out of Mark's area, if not leaving the job completely is like a second affair, is baloney. He however has no qualms to be in a business relationship (the shop) with one of his lovers for a considerate time AFTER reconciling with his wife. That’s the perfect example of a double standard.
"Tear it all down and start again" frankly doesn’t work and is a pipedream. You can’t build a new revamped relationship upon ruins. The saying that he did it to save his marriage is frankly simply ludicrous and unbelievable. He simply added to the wounds and in real life his actions would have made sure that a nasty divorce would be the only outcome. To use the analogy from the story: she might have burned half the bedchamber, but he overdid it and not only destroyed the rest of the room but he made sure to torch the entire house in the process.
The marriage is dead. He purposely put a stake through it. He has become so vengeful, angry and petty that any reconcilliation between the two should have been a non starter. They would be both better of apart than together.The fact she gives in and tries to (succesfully?) reconcile is more because she has no money. But it is simply not logical nor rational and frankly nor is it safe. She has become a hostage to her marriage, not an equal partner. In the long run he made sure distrust will reign supreme and the marriage will not survive.
PS: Well written though!
Interesting
The classic counseling view is that revenge is destructive. This story gives a different view. The destruction has already been done to half of the marriage. To rebuild without revenge, David would have been the one that needed to recover. Sarah would simply wait for him to recover, forgive her, and accept the situation. Note that most people like David, in this type of situation, NEVER fully recover. Most humans may learn to accommodate themselves to what happened but the experience leaves scarring. People with scarring learn that scarred tissue is less able to feel and not as flexible. Meanwhile, what price would Sarah pay? Certainly the pain of exposure and the loss of David's trust. But all in all, far less than David.
David decides that fairness demands Sarah suffer as well. And David needs some personal recovery to rebuild his confidence and self esteem. Now the scales are balanced. Sarah has paid a significant price that has taught her the cost of betrayal. It also put doubt in her mind about her standing as a partner just like David had. She really has an understanding of how David feels.
This certainly would not be my solution to a wife that had an affair and lied about it for years while continuing to work with her lover. However, the story does a good job of showing why it IS a solution for David.
Excellent Writing
One of the most interesting views on how to save a marriage I've every read. Really quite genius, balancing the scales nicely and making it hard for her to walk away. Very entertaining, Thank you
5*
Another outstanding tale and what an amazing amount of story for just 3 pages.
Complete and total BS
Besides the MAJOR, make or break issue of trust ( Ch 2:" I knew those things might someday be restored but they'd only be A SHADOW of what they once were."), now when they are having sex....
She gets to remember how he revenge cuckolded her 8 times for every once she did it with not one, but 3 different women, and how HE INITIATED each of these affairs INTENDED to hurt her & which he INTENDED to show her.
While
He gets to remember VIVIDLY how much better she liked sex with her better endowed lover.
Kids or no kids, chances of that marriage surviving: 0.00%
I think not. Good writing however.
Each time he remembers wife having "oh my gawd!!" better sex with her lover, not even a bottle of Viagra would help him. Nor would he want to take it.
Further, his getting revenge would do nothing to help him overcome her betrayal.
And exactly how do you ever again trust someone who could lie to you for 4 years??
Are you sure you
aren't JPB. Please take it as a compliment. He is an excellent writer and story teller.
Sophistry
is just bs without the odor. The hubby really needs to cause pain to feel even. It is never even. He is a the villain in this story. She needs to get a back bone and leave his butt. I hated his character with extreme passion. His rational for his actions is nonsensical. I am left with an unclean feeling about my skin.
You left out an important item:
The husband has control of the money. To protect herself, she needed to establish a way to protect the money they both earned so that when the kids leave he cannot pull the same stunt on her.. Clearly he intends to leave her and with the trick he played before, she needs to be able to set aside a sizable sum so it will not disappear again. In many ways neither of these people is likable, but I have to say in the end, I like her more. Both did terrible things. but he gave up the high moral ground and essentially made it impossible to heal their wounds. He will leave in the end no matter what she does to make things better because he believes he was justified in his cheating, and she knows she was not. In fact, in many ways, he gave her back moral standing in this. They did not end out equal in this no matter what the husband thinks.
A New Take
A very interesting read. Very different, lots of surprises.
Interesting take
Not sure David's solution was right ( and BTW, I totally called that he had had affair too), but the key is it was right for him. He was the first injured and -if we take him at face value that he wanted to try to save the marriage - this was what he needed to do. He made it clear that it might not be tolerable to his wife, but she created the imbalance that he dealt with as he could.
Would I do it? Like Amyyum, I wouldn't cheat and wouldn't tolerate cheating, so it's easy for me to say what I would do, but I don't think it would be this. But, what made this story interesting to me, was that David wasn't like most victims of cheating on LW. He did what he needed to do and that was the story.
It was different, interesting, well written. 5 stars from me.
revenge?
So why did his first affair start a month or two before Rachel gave him the evidence of her affair which in fact amounted to a couple of quickies at a seminar.
I think he is a complete wanker and has no consideration for his kids ir those of the women he became involved with.
Thanks for the read and the time you spent.
Simply Exquisite Solution
Raymond was a victim of prescribed thinking when he regurgitated the old platitude; "Two wrongs don't make a right." Typical book learned response. He was a misinformed idiot! What he and the slut wife failed to understand was that David wasn't trying to save the marriage, David was trying to save David.
He wasn't getting revenge! He was fighting back! (The revenge came later).
He was fighting for all those intangibles (you know: pride, positive temperament and disposition, self esteem, strength/energy, confidence, etc.) all that stuff that was part of Davids former pre-cuckholded self. The intangibles that let him look into a mirror every morning and not turn away in self loathing and disgust.
Leveling the playing field (battlefield) for the future of the marriage negotiations was not wrong, it was necessary.
(Hell! Even I might even have been tempted to hang around, at least until the kids were old enough and/or moved out).
So who ever said; "Two wrongs don't make a right." Was WRONG!
Two "wrongs" can most definitely make it right! Especially if one of the wrongs wasn't wrong at all.
FINALLY we have a new writer that isn't some kind of a cream pie eating, non-man bitch writer.
From what little I have been able to read, the effluvia from the current spate of wimpy wannabe's has been dismally disgusting. They have caused me more than a little amount of nausea.
But I digress! You know it's getting pretty bad when I start sounding like that Barry in California guy.
Well, I hate to tell you that I told you so but...
... I told you so. Actually, I'm lying because I LOVE to tell you that I told you so. Of course, as I said in my comments after Ch. 01, the dead give away was the female POV. Also, when it looks like shit, smells like shit, and tastes like shit, guess what? It's usually shit.
I agree
I agree with Zed0 100%. This marriage is dead. It died with the wife's breach of trust. Waiting for the children to grow up is just delaying the burial.
It will be difficult...
It will be difficult to this marriage to survive, but I'm optimistic guy and believe they will survive and get stronger after their kids leave...
This was the best
story in a very long time! It had everything, it had tension, it had a plot (objective) and it contained justice. The justice is debatable, whether it was too much or to cruel can be argued both ways. For a story, revenge like this is very satisfying but in real life there is little hope for a couple in similar circumstance. Five giant stars! I look forward to many more stories from this author.
Rated a 4 but was disappointing compared to the first installment
Didnt have the dramatic tensiion, never got me as emotionally involved as the first part of the story. The resolution was interesting, in that the husband had this whole other life he was leading, Thx for your efforts and looking forward to more of your work.
BTB:
This story is so inferior to your other LOVING WIFE stories not related to 'Brownwood'. As much as I enjoyed your first two LOVING WIFE stories I didn't even read chapter 1, and this one sucked. You had better start writing some BTB stories or your future here is defiantly in question.
Good story overall.
I enjoyed the story even if I didn't like the path chosen by the characters (revenge sex and reconciliation). It was well written and plausible. Good job!
Good story
I suspect that, in real life, the wife would have been more upset, and had more trust and betrayal issues, concerning the fact that this guy stole her money, then this woman seemed to. But thanks for posting.
Absolutely Brilliant...
...for the first time,a story that clearly SHOWS the damage that cheating causes - IN DETAIL!!
The harsh reality is that for years,there will be pain and doubts.
All so very well expressed in this excellently written story.
Payback sure is a Bitch....
Original, whether or not one likes the path chosen
I gave it a 5.
I agree that the part about "your job was a second affair" has merit and is an interesting twist. The pain and difficulty of recovery and angst about the path to choose, along with the difficulty involved with any possible path, also seems realistic.
It held my attention, was thought provoking and enjoyable. Whether or not one agrees with the actions of the husband and wife, IMO those things merit five stars.
She says Mark was attacked by a "jealous husband...?"
More like a justice-seeking avenging husband, I'd say.
Excellent
Great tale. The husband used logic in planning his revenge against his wife's affair. It also made up for the four years of lying by omission. In this case the revenge sex worked. It's just a shame that this would not work in real life. The marriage would not have lasted past the husband finding out about the affair. There would have been no need for revenge sex, which doesn't work. In fiction, however, it makes for an excellent read. Author I believe every tale you have written so far has been excellent. Keep up the good work.
Five Stars
Loved it
Five stars. What an ending.
Wife's real infidelity.
The true infidelity in this story was that the wife transferred her allegiance to her coworker from her husband. That started the downhill on the marriage. Once she had done that it was easy to physically cheat, but not so easy to transfer her allegiance back when she quit screwing the boss. She stayed in his orbit, she allowed him into her home and allowed him to be in situations where he could look down at her husband, which unless you are a woman, you know that he was. She convinced herself that although what she had done was "slightly" wrong she made up for it by allowing her husband some of the "perks" that the boss had been given. And even when she started to think that the husband knew something instead of confronting him and working it out she called to boss and warned him and even commiserated with him that it was not a good thing that her husband knew. She even called him a second time to chat about what was going on. Allegiance still in the wrong place. Then during the counseling she keeps trying to show how much she was hurt by what hubby did and that she had paid the price for her "little" indiscretion during the 4 year making it up to him, sort of, time period. Of course the little bitch psychologist agreed with her, hubby was being mean and stuff. (and yes I know the story stated that the psych was a guy, still a little bitch). With her conversations and her video stuff she took all three of the things away from her husband that he used the affairs to get back. And neither she nor her little bitch psych dude saw it or understood it. I agree with the husband, if she can't handle the fruit she shouldn't have planted the tree. And then nurtured it for so long.
Very well written. I also agree that neither of the characters were very likeable, but she chose her actions, he reacted into his after she had destroyed what he had been before that affair of hers.
Well Done
Just found your stories and can say that I truly enjoy them. I hope you will submit many more. I have nothing negative to say about your skill in presenting the material. As I said, "well done" in all respects.
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