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The First Ch. 03

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by Anonymous08/30/14

Whuuuut?

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by Anonymous09/01/14

Seems rushed...

This story seems to have missed out on vital editing and consequently seems rushed, doesn't really make sense. Slow it down, get the help of an editor, decide how to present the story and stick with that style.
It has potential but is just too unfinished as yet...

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