All Comments on 'Prom Pt. 01'

I really like where this story is going..looking forward to the journey. I wouldn't mind taking that trip myself :-)

...Sounds like fun, but we need to know a lot more about you, as the narrator and the main character, I want to follow you, and 'feel' and 'see' what you are going through, but I have no idea who you are, or why you would feel willing to expose yourself to being seen 'out' as a girl. Can understand Kelly and Danielle's motivation, getting a guy in touch with his fem side is always fun. Thanks for sharing the story, hope it goes in a positive direction, can't wait for the next chapter and more info about 'you'.

I'd keep this going. It's a well sketched beginning!

I'll check back at chapter 6 or whatever maybe it'll get the juices flowing by then

I agree with Joscelyn2tg.

The only thing we know about "Ellie" is that he is 18, 5'5, slim built with medium length dark brown hair. We don't even know his name.

More of a back story to "Ellie" would be great.

I'll stick around for the next chapter or two to see how things progress.

I look forward to the rest of the story

A bit more back story could be dealt with in the next part. These characters are more easy to engage when more is known. That's part of good fiction writing.

Very cute xxxxx

I agree with the other posters that you just jump right into the story too quickly. A little more slowly and a bit more back story would make the story so much richer. Good writing, by the way, and thanks for that. L

Hey guys! I'll do my best to add in more background as the next chapter goes! It's my first story ever so I'm getting used to some things! Thanks for the suggestions!

Please don't write in the present tense unless you have a good reason for it. The past tense looks much more natural.