An excellent story. Two interesting people funny at times and then the main part of the story. Good twist if that's the right word about the cock and the bum, well done
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Anonymous08/26/14
Good story.
An editor would help with getting verb tenses correct (especially at the beginning of this tale) .
I wish it would be longer... You can definitely write! Please go on and create more complex stories!
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Anonymous08/28/14
Well done
As already stated by one reader, it needed some editing, but other than that, it was very good. I love redheads, especially with the alabaster skin that many of them have and I could spend days making love to the right one. I enjoyed the build up and the "Love at first sight" beginning, and hope that you will continue to write. Maybe, a second chapter to this could be arranged?
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Nice
Nicely done, especially the outdoor scenes.
Interesting Fishing trip
An excellent story. Two interesting people funny at times and then the main part of the story. Good twist if that's the right word about the cock and the bum, well done
Good story.
An editor would help with getting verb tenses correct (especially at the beginning of this tale) .
I wish it would be longer... You can definitely write! Please go on and create more complex stories!
Well done
As already stated by one reader, it needed some editing, but other than that, it was very good. I love redheads, especially with the alabaster skin that many of them have and I could spend days making love to the right one. I enjoyed the build up and the "Love at first sight" beginning, and hope that you will continue to write. Maybe, a second chapter to this could be arranged?
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