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by Sir Galahad10/28/14

Nice start. Now finish it.

You've started a good short story here, but you need to finish not just their initial copulation, but what comes after. I'd suggest having them go climbing, have each other again on the mountain or in a convenient copse of trees, then return to camp and spend the evening in a boinkfest in her tent. After that, depending on what the characters tell you, you can end the story or set it up open-ended for further adventures with the two.

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by Anonymous10/28/14

"... fresh pool of seamen between her shapely melons ."

Really?
What ship were they off?
Merchant ship?
Naval ship?
You give her breasts a highly improbable 40HH but you wouldn't hide very many seamen behind even those!
Or did you perhaps mean 'semen'?

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