Glad this series took an incestuous turn. You're obviously a good writer, but the dialog seems stilted. It works for the mother perhaps but not the kids.
The story has had a directional shift. Yet it seems a natural move. So very easy for a brother and sister to drift together like this. Well done, let's hope there will be more!
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Mom brings them together
Glad this series took an incestuous turn. You're obviously a good writer, but the dialog seems stilted. It works for the mother perhaps but not the kids.
Very interesting development
The story has had a directional shift. Yet it seems a natural move. So very easy for a brother and sister to drift together like this. Well done, let's hope there will be more!
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