Nice little story that, like a butterfly, flutters into your sight for a few moments and then is gone. What makes it special is deep respect you always show your characters, it gives them life and makes them live on in my imagination long after the story is gone.
There is a matter-of-fact tone to your writing that I personally really like. Always look forward to your stories and always enjoy them.
BUT THEN AGAIN I HAVE ENJOYED MOST OF WHAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN. PLEASE CONTINUE TO TELL THEIR STORY.
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Anonymous08/31/14
Mary's a little young to be a vet
The program takes 8 years of college. If she's 25, she's probably a going-into-4th-year grad student doing clinical rotations, and certainly doesn't have time to go to the beach for two days. If she does have two days when she isn't doing rotations and doesn't need to be studying, she'll be asleep.
DGH, I enjoyed the low-key ambiance of this story. And fun sex!
I understand that you wrote your characters they way you imagineered their backgrounds.
I just wondered why Mary's family would oppose her working to become a veterinarian. Many Mennonites even today are still farmers, even if just part time.
I am speaking from ignorance, so please excuse if I make one of my infinitesimal errors of fact.
The Mennonite community (as Pacifist Christians) certainly deserves one claim to fame.
That is they supply many of the US Military Medical Field Corpsmen. Who have saved the lives of a ,multitude of US servicemen in combat.
Many courageously giving their lives or suffering permanent disabilities from wounds and injuries sustained while saving others.
In addition the Mennonite communities voluntarily supply manpower and assistance during public disasters.
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Anonymous09/04/14
More!
I thought the storyline (as far as erotic stories go) was fun, romantic and fairly plausable. The only problem is that we need more!
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Anonymous09/09/14
Sweet Story ****
D G,
I haven’t been on this site for nearly a year, but tonight decided I needed something to read. I saw you had a story in the Summer Lovin’ contest and thought I’ve always like D G’s stories, I’ll read that one. Most of your facts are right about the Amish and Mennonites and I enjoyed the story.
I have to agree with the comments about grammatical errors. Several would have been caught by just running the story through spell check. And while I did think your dialog was a little wooden I have to disagree with Scotsman69, the story was still very sweet and much better than most of the dribble that’s found on this site. I hope the next time I check in here, I’ll find a second chapter to John and Mary’s story. A HEA chapter please.
Nice little mixture of erotic coupling and romance. The question I would want to ask her is where she would see herself ten years from now. Basically it is a question of whether she intends to follow her career or her family?
English
Love all your stuff
Nice little story that, like a butterfly, flutters into your sight for a few moments and then is gone. What makes it special is deep respect you always show your characters, it gives them life and makes them live on in my imagination long after the story is gone.
There is a matter-of-fact tone to your writing that I personally really like. Always look forward to your stories and always enjoy them.
Always write a good story
As soon as I saw your name I had to read this story. You did not disappoint me. Good read and I look forward to your next story.
Loved it!!!
And, would love to read more on their lives. The difficulties of meshing two cultures would be an outstanding read!!!
Please consider it DG!!!!
wow
Thanks for a great read,Please continue this story Im hooked need more ! Dagoatmandavid said it and Ill always be back for your stories Cya later
Liked it very much
I have read most of your stories on Lit and am always looking forward to more.
Thank you for sharing them with us
MORE PLEASE!
You are an outstanding author and this story illustrates that. I would greatly appreciate another chapter or two. Thanks for the great read!
For an experienced author
there were rather a lot of silly and easily-correctable errors. And the writing was rather wooden. I won't be reading more from you. Two stars.
Great story foundation
Hope there is more to come from your pen.
I ENJOYED THE STORY
BUT THEN AGAIN I HAVE ENJOYED MOST OF WHAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN. PLEASE CONTINUE TO TELL THEIR STORY.
Mary's a little young to be a vet
The program takes 8 years of college. If she's 25, she's probably a going-into-4th-year grad student doing clinical rotations, and certainly doesn't have time to go to the beach for two days. If she does have two days when she isn't doing rotations and doesn't need to be studying, she'll be asleep.
Great little story
Good read, I enjoyed it.
An editor who can spell
Get one.
good so far
curious to see where you will take us
Authoritive license
DGH, I enjoyed the low-key ambiance of this story. And fun sex!
I understand that you wrote your characters they way you imagineered their backgrounds.
I just wondered why Mary's family would oppose her working to become a veterinarian. Many Mennonites even today are still farmers, even if just part time.
I am speaking from ignorance, so please excuse if I make one of my infinitesimal errors of fact.
The Mennonite community (as Pacifist Christians) certainly deserves one claim to fame.
That is they supply many of the US Military Medical Field Corpsmen. Who have saved the lives of a ,multitude of US servicemen in combat.
Many courageously giving their lives or suffering permanent disabilities from wounds and injuries sustained while saving others.
In addition the Mennonite communities voluntarily supply manpower and assistance during public disasters.
More!
I thought the storyline (as far as erotic stories go) was fun, romantic and fairly plausable. The only problem is that we need more!
Sweet Story ****
D G,
I haven’t been on this site for nearly a year, but tonight decided I needed something to read. I saw you had a story in the Summer Lovin’ contest and thought I’ve always like D G’s stories, I’ll read that one. Most of your facts are right about the Amish and Mennonites and I enjoyed the story.
I have to agree with the comments about grammatical errors. Several would have been caught by just running the story through spell check. And while I did think your dialog was a little wooden I have to disagree with Scotsman69, the story was still very sweet and much better than most of the dribble that’s found on this site. I hope the next time I check in here, I’ll find a second chapter to John and Mary’s story. A HEA chapter please.
A Romp
Nice little mixture of erotic coupling and romance. The question I would want to ask her is where she would see herself ten years from now. Basically it is a question of whether she intends to follow her career or her family?
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