The Babysitter Threesome

Badly written and thought out

Did you ever hear of pacing ?
Why does the sitter consent?
How can he posibly spank her if she is cuffed and restrained and cant move

Needed more set up

where was the seduction?
was this the first time?

some dialogue would help too.

Congrats.

You managed to make an eight paragraph short story boring.

Thanks for the feedback

I appreciate all of the feedback; as this was my first story, I wanted to get some ideas as to how I did. I will take everything here into consideration as I attempt to write more short stories. Thanks to everyone who has commented so far.

I agree with other comments. If at the end you said you woke up I would believe it as it seemed like a dream or some 15 year old boy's fantasy

Maybe Re-Post...

...under Non-Erotic!

Juvenile

Have you ever had sex?