26E tits........... Must have really been a skinny bitch.
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Anonymous09/03/14
re: keep your opinions to yourself
Posting opinions, pro or con, is the essence of comments. What, you only want comments that will kiss your ass?
by
Anonymous09/03/14
Good story but too short for developing such a relationship between mom and son
The story concept works and even the style of writing shows promise.
It is just that for a credible son/mom master slave relationship to have properly developed, needed much more than one chapter let alone one page!
Please do write a longer version of this story. I am sure that it would be great!
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Anonymous09/03/14
there's definitely a place for such very short stories
Especially since some monomaniacal authors inflict 10, 12, even 16 page behemoths on us. What I object to is the current fad on Lit, where the writer's bio shows him? her? it? to be an asexual, ageless nonentity existing nowhere in particular. I like the hero of this story. Xander's a big strong 18 year old, super aggressive, which is proper for the male though he shouldn't push it to the point of causing pain. Sex is about pleasure, not pain. Naturally, like lots and lots of boys, more all the time, testosterone-fueled Xander's drawn to his own mother's cunt. After all, it's the receptacle nature provides for the boy's big hard cock and all the creamy semen in his hot young balls. Let's hope that in future installments Xander and his mom skip the pain and slave shit, and just enjoy their hot incestuous fucks, with the football hero in charge of course. Xander'll be real pleased and proud, and as the saying goes, "a son-fucked twat is a happy twat."
To do so would be an insult to REAL authors.
You should have paid more attention in English Class.
I could not even get past five or ten lines.
Find another hobby . . . like studying English.
Don't care if you like criticism or not. Your writing and intellect is enough to make anyone with an education above the 5th grade ill when trying to read your sludge. It's distracting and thoroughly detracts from the enjoyment of such a potentially good plot. You clearly need to get a better understanding of breasts, body size and type, and the SAE measuring system cause the implausibility of your proportion also detracts from the story. So, go back to high school for your GED and do more with your life than pedal swill like this.
Moronic!!
Hard to bust a nut if you have to continuously reread in order to filter through the "I slept through grammar class. . . . . both times" copy.
English
as you request
I'll keep my opinions of this piece of crap to myself!
26E tits????????????????
26E tits........... Must have really been a skinny bitch.
re: keep your opinions to yourself
Posting opinions, pro or con, is the essence of comments. What, you only want comments that will kiss your ass?
Good story but too short for developing such a relationship between mom and son
The story concept works and even the style of writing shows promise.
It is just that for a credible son/mom master slave relationship to have properly developed, needed much more than one chapter let alone one page!
Please do write a longer version of this story. I am sure that it would be great!
there's definitely a place for such very short stories
Especially since some monomaniacal authors inflict 10, 12, even 16 page behemoths on us. What I object to is the current fad on Lit, where the writer's bio shows him? her? it? to be an asexual, ageless nonentity existing nowhere in particular. I like the hero of this story. Xander's a big strong 18 year old, super aggressive, which is proper for the male though he shouldn't push it to the point of causing pain. Sex is about pleasure, not pain. Naturally, like lots and lots of boys, more all the time, testosterone-fueled Xander's drawn to his own mother's cunt. After all, it's the receptacle nature provides for the boy's big hard cock and all the creamy semen in his hot young balls. Let's hope that in future installments Xander and his mom skip the pain and slave shit, and just enjoy their hot incestuous fucks, with the football hero in charge of course. Xander'll be real pleased and proud, and as the saying goes, "a son-fucked twat is a happy twat."
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If you don't like criticism that goes along with free sex story sites then don't write here.
DO NOT CALL YOURSELF AN AUTHOR!
To do so would be an insult to REAL authors.
You should have paid more attention in English Class.
I could not even get past five or ten lines.
Find another hobby . . . like studying English.
sad excuse
Don't care if you like criticism or not. Your writing and intellect is enough to make anyone with an education above the 5th grade ill when trying to read your sludge. It's distracting and thoroughly detracts from the enjoyment of such a potentially good plot. You clearly need to get a better understanding of breasts, body size and type, and the SAE measuring system cause the implausibility of your proportion also detracts from the story. So, go back to high school for your GED and do more with your life than pedal swill like this.
Too bad to finish reading
I had to stop with "like a botch in heat". This was a botched up mess of verbage. Couldn't call it a 'story'.
Puhhhleeeese
Moronic!!
Hard to bust a nut if you have to continuously reread in order to filter through the "I slept through grammar class. . . . . both times" copy.
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