No scene-setting, no character development, some awkward sentence structure, far too many typos... don't stop writing, but slow down a bit to build the moment.
Thanks for the feedback but I just write these for myself when in need of a good wank, if others like them well then that's a bonus, I'll never be too discerning about typos or setting just a good orgasm does me!
...then that is fine, no need to deal with things like spelling, grammar, structure, etc.
However, if you are going to SHARE them by posting them then by all means, you have to at least attempt to work on these things. Otherwise, just write it and save it, but don't upload it. It is a good story that needs a lot of polish.
But not real bad, the basics of the story is good. You do need to take time to proof read it or send it to someone to proof read for you. I did enjoy it, please write another chapter.
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Anonymous09/18/14
Excellent
Omg! That was my fantasy with my teachers!! If only I could have fulfilled them!
Excellent chapter!
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Anonymous09/26/14
Good story, bad execution
I understand you are not trying for a Pulitzer, but your style leaves a lot to be desired. On the other hand, you have quite an imagination and I would love to play in this scene, so my cock will be enjoying a release later when I am alone with my thoughts.
English
Nope
No scene-setting, no character development, some awkward sentence structure, far too many typos... don't stop writing, but slow down a bit to build the moment.
Thanks
Thanks for the feedback but I just write these for myself when in need of a good wank, if others like them well then that's a bonus, I'll never be too discerning about typos or setting just a good orgasm does me!
If you write them for yourself...
...then that is fine, no need to deal with things like spelling, grammar, structure, etc.
However, if you are going to SHARE them by posting them then by all means, you have to at least attempt to work on these things. Otherwise, just write it and save it, but don't upload it. It is a good story that needs a lot of polish.
ROUGH
But not real bad, the basics of the story is good. You do need to take time to proof read it or send it to someone to proof read for you. I did enjoy it, please write another chapter.
Excellent
Omg! That was my fantasy with my teachers!! If only I could have fulfilled them!
Excellent chapter!
Good story, bad execution
I understand you are not trying for a Pulitzer, but your style leaves a lot to be desired. On the other hand, you have quite an imagination and I would love to play in this scene, so my cock will be enjoying a release later when I am alone with my thoughts.
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