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by Anonymous

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by HoneyAdored09/04/14

Mmmm! Beautiful lines...

...the poem and the image
Small and perfectly formed, each stroke of your pen delicately defines the shape

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by Ashesh909/04/14

.....smallness of your back

That curves into
The smallness of your cheeks
........that get cupped inside
palm of my hands ..........
....an inveterate , unashamed Bottom lover like me can go places'n do things with this Poem of yours , Oldbear !! thank you for sharin' : 5-ed ....

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by pelegrino09/07/14

There is a very big Makrocosmos in your beautiful mikrocosmos, Oldbear!
5ed

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by todski2809/08/14

5ed

oldbear, but wonder if the final line

"to curve"

would be better breaking the pattern you set up and writing instead

"to bend"

so you have a totally different word with different sonics but a duality in meaning, bends can mean a similar thing in to curves but also has a secondary meaning to ":bending over"

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