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Mommy Love
Damn, dude, this shit was dark, but cool. You had a few mistakes but it was all good. Tina (Jaden calls her by her first name once) may have been a junkie but she was a momma at the end of the day. She raped/fucked 'cause she thought she was loving him.
Keep doing ya writing thing, my nigga
Well, that certainly was different
I can't recall any other story on Literotica written from a ghetto perspective. To that degree, it was almost a breath of fresh air. However, it suffered from the fact it needed an editor or, at least, a proofreader. (Every writer--even me, or maybe, especially me--can benefit from a fresh set of eyes.)
The protagonist is a likeable character who deserves our respect for having succeeded is an environment where successes are few and far between. And, for him to have succeeded when the most important person in his life (his mom) is such a morally weak character makes his success all that more laudatory. This juxtaposition made for a most interesting read.
This is an author from whom we should great things in the future--once he corrects the minor but distracting flaws.
I'll give an "A" for effort
Even though the story has some grammatical errors and it sounds like a white person wrote it. It wasn't. a bad story it was pretty good in fact, but it would have been better if the setting was more privet. Come on a shelter a parently you never lived in one. But over all I like it, and there is even room for a follow up story.
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