Velvet Ice Case No. 01

Predictable

A well written story. Of course the plot was a bit predictable, but the details brought life to the plot.
I enjoyed this read very much. Its a believable story. Thanks for posting it.

pleasure to have you back. my favorite author by far :)

pleasure to have you back. my favorite author by far :)

As always, Jane, I liked your story telling. So talented! (Oh, btw, I tried emailing you and it keeps coming back bounced. )

has potential but needs work

Story and the character have potential.

But her character development needs to be fleshed out better. Here she flip flopped between skilled/prepared/ready and dumb/scared too quickly and often.

You also need help from an editor/proofreader as the errors detract from the otherwise good story.

I liked the character and hope you build further series.