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A Dark New Home

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous09/15/14

Why so abrupt?

After such a fascinating build-up, it just ends with outrageous ambiguity.

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by jstltm09/15/14

Fair comment

Yeah sorry about that one, I was kinda going for the dread thing...but I will splash them together more in my later ones, give you guys some breaks!

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by Anonymous09/18/14

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Wow, Loved it.

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by Anonymous09/21/14

Wow, could be a great story if longer

Great prose, loved it but this was way too short. There was the build up and then "drop off a cliff" ending. Keep going. You're off to a great start!

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by Anonymous03/08/15

Great beginning but would've been better..

Would've been better with some more detail at the end there. Great start though

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