Potent voyeur fantasy with a very realistic voice!
Perhaps I'm admitting too much, but you've definitely captured the essence of the habitual girl-watcher's inner monologue here. Very natural and consistent tone & verbiage make the protagonist a credible, fully realized character despite how little we actually know about him, and the steadily increasing tension as you build toward the full flash is wonderfully unbearable. Best of all, the story never loses an ounce of believability when it transitions from more plausible voyeur encounter to full-on XXX fantasy with the silent encounter in the park. That's a credit to your ability to sustain character and voice throughout. Topnotch work!
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Potent voyeur fantasy with a very realistic voice!
Perhaps I'm admitting too much, but you've definitely captured the essence of the habitual girl-watcher's inner monologue here. Very natural and consistent tone & verbiage make the protagonist a credible, fully realized character despite how little we actually know about him, and the steadily increasing tension as you build toward the full flash is wonderfully unbearable. Best of all, the story never loses an ounce of believability when it transitions from more plausible voyeur encounter to full-on XXX fantasy with the silent encounter in the park. That's a credit to your ability to sustain character and voice throughout. Topnotch work!
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