All Comments on 'A Gift Bestowed'

Too short. You are just now building up and then stop. There's no mind control.

I agree with the last post just as you were going for the MC part of the story it stops. It has possibilities but as of now it doesn't even belong in this section.

The author is building up a story. That's awful.

Seriously, though I can't wait for the continuation of the story. I really enjoyed the introduction!

Liked the start, just ... dont turn him into a heartless, unfeeling, power mad freak..:)

It is a novel twist and well done, I look forward to seeing where it goes. Why not wait and see where it goes before all of the "doesn't belong here" crap.

Off to a very interesting start, except you really need help with English. Suggest you find someone to review/correct your work before posting.

Now that he has the Gift. It will be interesting to see if he keeps it in the Family or does he frustrate his sisters and mother and use it on others. like those who could help his family so Mom does'nt have to work. and maybe put the Sisters through college.

but you have our curiosity.

let's see where this is leading. hopefully it will be a bawdy romp with some fun for everyone. and, as others have mentioned, don't let it get negative and cruel. there is enough of that already.

how about some entertaining exploration and intrigue. please.

you have already set the stage with Jane and Meagan, just keep it fun for all of them, without becoming degrading.

I also think you made a decent start but I live for mind control tales. As said before. please don't make him a power mad despot. A normal hormonal teenager will be fine.

"Matt's father for his thirteenth birthday took him to see Percy Jackson and the Lightning Thief . . "

please sir, may I have a comma?

rotflmfao

Yes, I've read over three hundred stories. I like the beginning of this one but where's the rest of it? What more is there? Great beginning but what else? Now, if you can't figure this out; I want MORE, period. Thank you.

MORE PLEASE

Great job, I love stories like these. I would really appreciate being able to see where this story goes

Awesome

Please continue

Minor nitpick: the goddess in question is spelled "Peitho" not "Pietho".

Source: Google & Wikipedia.