Dark Horse Ch. 01

Well written

But oh sooo not BDSM
Non con or fetish is the right category.

You absolutely must continue,

Love the story line and characters so far.

Wrong Catagory

This is just not erotic!

Oh ye of little patience...

There are rewards if you make it to the end.

making it to the end?

you have only begun with a tease, yet you expect us to be patient.
you, my dear, are the person who enjoys the build up more than the culmination.
and, if I am correct, it is the intrigue of the unknown that is far more critical than the outcome.

Masterfuljim, maybe it don't contain BDSM as you recognize it but the content is definitely of a BDSM nature and a legitimate genre to put it under. SSC may be a guideline for many but, strictly speaking, BDSM does not hinge on consent.

Anon wake up

The comment was not about whether it was BDSM or not it was regarding that this is beginning as a non con piece. And yes it should not be in BDSM because the girl/woman is kidnapped! Is being forced to remove herself as a person and become an object/pet named Velvet. Even rap fantasies are cleared through comments and emotions that the victim is understanding that this a safe scene. This is not SSC or RACK. This is forced. It should not be here.

getthebook, go take a nap

And, if in the last chapter it turns out that this was all negotiated, suddenly it becomes an elaborate scene. Fact is, you have no idea where this story is going or what is happening. Honestly, even if it's not consensual in the end I'll respect that the author felt it was BDSM. Not every piece of BDSM fiction needs to implement RACK or SSC... hence the fiction.

BDSM or not BDSM?

That's the question. Whether it is nobler to shut thyself off from a spiraling debate in the comments or take arms against a sea of opinion and end them.

Yes, it might have a fetish slant and not espouse the ideas of safe-words, limits and RACK, but it is a fantasy at the end of the day and should be treated as such. I, for one, really liked the descriptions and dialogue alongside the delicious tease of the plot.

Keep it up.

Interesting

You recommended this in your bio so I thought I'd give it a go. Even though this is not my usual fare I was intrigued by the subject matter. The writing in this is story weaker than in your later work, I've only read Derelict 0006, so maybe you've just gotten better over time. I can't really put words to my thoughts but your descriptions were a little flat. For me, something is missing. I do think Elizabeth is an interesting character and I want to see how her control over Velvet develops. I hope you will be adding others to Elizabeth's stable as the story progresses. I really wish I could be more constructive in my critique but I'm not a writer just a fan. So on to Part 02.