I thought you focused on what I know some women enjoy--having the male sub clean their dirty crack in the rear. Soon the man begins to see it as a privilege.
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
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Anonymous09/23/14
Atrocious
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
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nice job
I thought you focused on what I know some women enjoy--having the male sub clean their dirty crack in the rear. Soon the man begins to see it as a privilege.
WOW,,,,,
4sure on the wild side
Atrocious
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
Atrocious
No build up, bad grammar, bad spelling, no description of character, the whole plot has potential but needs to be written like you care if anyone enjoys it. Sorry but I hope honest feedback is appreciated.
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