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by todski2809/22/14

my favourite poem

of yours I have ever read I think!

recommended in new poem reviews, the red and fire of the first stanza is awesome in imagery and metaphor,

(presented in folds of floral perfection)

the pre, per sounds just sing of the tongue, fol, flo are like honey the assonance here is striking and the parentheses highlight it in a way that made me read it twice.

thanks for a brilliant read and a well deserved E

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by Trixareforkids09/22/14

A lovely late bloomer

The beginning of the third stanza, the two buts and the use of poem could be cleaned up to 'However, this is not for them' the however would sound good following houses and eliminate the double. Using the word poem in the piece takes me out of it, which is why I suggest removing it, just a thought.

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