All Comments on 'The Girl of My Dreams'

That was a fine introductory story; thank you for posting it for us to share. Advice? Keep writing -- it's the one sure way to improve -- and don't take too much notice of the detractors; there are plenty about. A nice piece of work -- five stars.

Definitely Ok for a first story

Very well done and lovely. Erotic stories such as this are so much better when the Eros and mutual attraction, both physical and romantic, are the main focus rather than the prurience. You have an obvious talent for this and I hope you keep at it, especially with even more on this story and characters.

I was with you the whole time Emily's petite feet in pantyhose had me hot! As turned on as I could be without sex you leave a lot to fill in I can't wait.

Great story. The beautiful redhead, who sat next to me in history class, turned out to be gay. Freaking gay. Can you believe it? I was so in love with her.