A very good first story, you set the scene beautifully. I'm not a fan of male sub stories (my bad!) but was drawn quickly by your descriptive writing style.
Well done and welcome to Lit.
Welcome to Lit! A very creditable first submission. Like Shysub, F/m stories are not my favorites, but this one is good. Encouraging that she seems to have some affection for the poor guy, we'll see what develops, as I assume there will be more to come. . .
I loved that She is so nonchalant in the way She takes total control of the slave and the way She toyed with his sexual weakness and need for domination. She knows She can break him at will and She also knows that despite his suffering he will be back for more....., I would like You to be back with more!...Thank you
I enjoyed reading this little story, it is not often that you read material of this kind that is well-written and descriptive. The author is obvious good with words and uses literary devices to tell the story whilst relishing in genre conventions which are crowd pleasers. Hope to be able to read more soon.
Thank you for posting it for us to read and welcome to Literotica as a new author. You show a lot of talent with this material -- well done. However, you, as the author, have to tell us what his fate is, as pointed out below; it is not our job as readers to have to guess.
Good work, four stars, and please continue with this story and don't leave us hanging!
and I've done an interrogation scene before but I love the idea of giving him 4 names that work as a sort of built in safe word when any one sort of torture is becoming too much.
I hope its not just pain and she'll switch to some pleasure for the later names maybe making him beg and unable to cum until he reveals the last name.
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Welcome!
A very good first story, you set the scene beautifully. I'm not a fan of male sub stories (my bad!) but was drawn quickly by your descriptive writing style.
Well done and welcome to Lit.
Good writing!
Welcome to Lit! A very creditable first submission. Like Shysub, F/m stories are not my favorites, but this one is good. Encouraging that she seems to have some affection for the poor guy, we'll see what develops, as I assume there will be more to come. . .
Great story
I loved that She is so nonchalant in the way She takes total control of the slave and the way She toyed with his sexual weakness and need for domination. She knows She can break him at will and She also knows that despite his suffering he will be back for more....., I would like You to be back with more!...Thank you
First time for everything
Interesting perspective ....
A well-written fantasy
I enjoyed reading this little story, it is not often that you read material of this kind that is well-written and descriptive. The author is obvious good with words and uses literary devices to tell the story whilst relishing in genre conventions which are crowd pleasers. Hope to be able to read more soon.
Very good
An enjoyable read. (Shame that anon. 'what fate?' didn't understand it.)
A nice story
Thank you for posting it for us to read and welcome to Literotica as a new author. You show a lot of talent with this material -- well done. However, you, as the author, have to tell us what his fate is, as pointed out below; it is not our job as readers to have to guess.
Good work, four stars, and please continue with this story and don't leave us hanging!
Hi everybody
Hi everybody- thank you for your lovely comments, and I'm very glad you enjoyed my story. I've drafted part two, and it should be ready to post soon!
Great Start
and I've done an interrogation scene before but I love the idea of giving him 4 names that work as a sort of built in safe word when any one sort of torture is becoming too much.
I hope its not just pain and she'll switch to some pleasure for the later names maybe making him beg and unable to cum until he reveals the last name.
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