The Basement

wow

excellent writing, very descriptive especially in the beginning. keep up the great work.

Terrific..!!

The style of writing and the intimidating suspense..!! Simply wow. :D

Fire_breeze - well done! This one will be replaying in my head for a while.

suprise

Very well written! And a surprise at the end, although i had a feeling, I wasnt sure!

I love it

hmmm

It is decent enough, I think though if you hadn't put the part in about her love coming home, it wouldn't have given it away for me.

Thought provoking, challenging and written with an uncompromising, uncomfortable edge that made it compelling. Well done. Lit should be about the boundaries of the mind not just meccano kit porn. Thank you.

Trigger Warning?

Very nicely written story. But the trigger warning nonsense almost dissuaded me from reading. Anyone who claims to need a trigger warning is a professional victim and self confessed weakling.

Could have, should have, would have...

This had the potential for greatness, but there were two problems with it. One, it didn't seem like you bothered to take even a cursory glance at it to do some editing because it's overflowing with typos, and mistakes which is distracting.

Two, while written well, there was no sense of who they were. No character development. No sense of their personalities. So, the emotion that you were trying to instill fell flat. He walks in, and starts abusing her. It's random, so I didn't feel anything. That's what you want people to do.... feel.

You have a great style though. Keep going. Just bring the characters to life a little more, or no one will care if they get abused.

I have no idea where the previous commentator got that your story was filled with spelling mistake, but it seems that they haven't heard of BRITISH spelling hahaha.

Great story, breezey. Keep it up, I love how you bring a slice of life alive.