Thank You Sister- My First Incest

English?

And they say there is no need to learn English these days. Was this written in another language then translating using cheap software into English? This is an ok story if you manage to muscle your way through the horrible writing. How about going back to grade 2 and start your education again?

it was good if you can get around the way it is put together

Hard to read - need English grammar

If you're going to write in English you need to have an English editor please. Impossible to read. I gave up after two paragraphs. It's unfortunate because it could be a good story if it was readable.

Too many critics!

Too many critics and not enough appreciation for the writer's efforts.

Anonymous Duschbags !!!!!

So his english isnt perfect......how many stories have u duschbags submitted ??? Get a life .

I thaught it was a very hot story. Thanks for sharing it and im jealous of you experiencing it. I hope u might have another family get together to write about.

Nice but..

Nice story but his English need to be improved. hey @ cockedandready69. You are asking him to improve his English, check urs dude. Its not thaught its thought :)))

Language

Someone wrote that this was impossible to read, idiotic comment, probably from one who has trouble reading English anyway. Whoever you are, I am sure that his English is better than your Hindi, his sentence construction is certainly much better than yours.
The story was written in fairly good Indian English and was fun to read, it could even be true.

not "horrible" at all

This is a perfectly understandable and very likely true to life story of hot sisterfucking. I believe it's a true story simply because the author tells us that fucking his sister was a one-off affair. It's a pity that the boy's beloved sister only spread her legs once for her big brother's big hard cock. She's not going to find a more devoted fucker than her big bro. Doesn't she realize that the stupid outmoded "taboo" is fading fast, the idiotic "taboo" that says that a boy's hard cock is never, ever supposed to find its way up his sister's sweet little slit, a boy's never ever absolutely not no way supposed to blow his young balls up his sister's cute little cunt. Fuck that shit. What, a young guy living at home is supposed to jerk it like some 13 year old, when there's his sister right there, with that wonderful hairy hole between her slender legs that's perfect for her big brother's powerful prick and for all the semen in his heavy loaded brotherly balls. Join the 21st century, girl, where sisters are really appreciating what their good-looking horny brothers have jumping around in their pants. Her big brother's mighty cock makes a sister sopping wet "down there," she's hotter than ever before, she cums like crazy, especially when he unloads those heavy balls of his and shoots his sister a great big twatful of his creamy brotherly semen.

Ist das wirklich schlechtes Englisch?

Mir hat die Geschichte sehr gefallen. Sie ist liebevoll und zärtlich. Vor allem aber finde ich keine abwertenden Ausdrücke wie "Hure" oder "Schlampe".

Übersetzung:
Is this really bad English?
I liked the story very much. It is lovingly and tenderly. But above all I do not find derogatory terms like "whore" or "slut".

very badly written

even a nonenglish speaker can see how bad this is.
even if we decided to disregard the grammar, the writing style, the storytelling, lack of character.

btw, this reeks unrealistic sexual expectations of a uninformed virgin.
feeling the g-spot, really?

and as far as i could understand, smitha is not author's sister but a cousin.

Grammar

You need to improve your grammar

Needs editing

Gave up trying to make sense of it after the second paragraph.