I don't think I would have ever had anything to do with the "friend" again. Other then that I can see this resolution working.
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Anonymous09/29/14
Please stop lying
Why do you lie to your readers with every story you write. You promise us "no voluntary cucks, or whiny simpering wimps." Yet every main character you write is a wimpy cuck just like this guy. And the guy in your last story. And the one before that. And so on and so on. Please remove that line from your preface cause it just ain't true.
A clean break would have been best. At first he was excited watching the wife and the friend. He recovered, however, and did what he had to do. Good tale.
I have to agree with the other comments, you made him a voluntary cuck here. He got excited by her cheating so it's only a matter of time before he has here suck off some other guy for his pleasure......
He gave her every chance to stop before she went too far. She didn't. He stopped it, even though he let it go a little further than I would have, and he gave her notice that she had no more chances left.
I almost always like your endings....This one is no exception...he was right...If he had stoped it in the begining, the "friend" would have keep trying, and he would not have a break anymore...If he forgave his wife, why not forgive his friend? Forgive is not forget...
by
Anonymous09/29/14
CUCK alert!
It isn't about what she was caught doing,
it is about what she WASN'T caught doing.
Stop pretending you're a man and go back to your closet.
by
Anonymous09/29/14
Shortsighted commenters
I like the idea of keeping the friend close. What's the old saying, keep your friends close and your enemies closer? The neighbor is punished by having something he wants so badly constantly waved under his nose, a reminder of what he almost had but never will. At the same time, neighbor boy has to watch his own wife get all chummy with the guy she gave a blowjob to, in front of him.
Shortsighted commenters talking about kicking the neighbor's ass, having nothing to do with him, etc. How foolish! Kick his ass and risk jail? Why? It's so much better to keep your eye on him, unless you plan to move away, and punish him with a 1000 little cuts. Wake up and smell the coffee, oh ye of the ignorant short-sighted comments, there's a right way and a wrong way to get revenge. Welcome to the right way.
by
Anonymous09/29/14
strange tale
no way would I have my dick out and be hard watching my wife cheat. A gun or
knife , maybe a bat or something that would cause him pain but not my dick.
friends after, are you nuts? nice try but not a real life tale.
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Anonymous09/29/14
Poor ending
The guy lets it get that far and then reacts that negatively? I don't buy it. He would have stopped it earlier if he was that opposed to the situation.
by
Anonymous09/29/14
My 2 Cents
To all those commentators who dumped on FTDS for creating a wimp husband. He didn't the original author did. FTDS took over after the husband went back on the patio and slammed the door so you people are wrong. This ending was consistent with the original and the ending was a fine finish to the damn story
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Anonymous09/29/14
worse and worse
I thought the last one was bad. It was painfully formulaic but at least the husband wasn't a voluntary cuck. I hope you get your mojo back soon.
To a tale that has been left unresolved for too long. Naturally, I like FTDS's darker interpretation of the unfinished tales he tackles, especially when they skirt along the edge of pain infliction because that is what the cheaters deserve. The wayward wife in this tale would most likely have gotten away with a lot more if the author of the original continued the story. Luckily, FTDS gave the story a fitting resolution which, although may be inconsistent with PTremer's voyeuristic predilections, gives the Hubby his balls back.
5*
by
Anonymous09/29/14
please go away!
FTDS, please go away! Your attempt to finish others stories is lame and content in others as arthuors...you show no respect to them nor their intended readers...please, for the sake of readers here quit doing these arthuors a 'favor' ...it just looks like you think are smarter, better at writing their story, which is dumb! If you don't like their story leave them a bad review, like this, but move on 'cause your not that good...you score btw is -10... now go away!
by
Anonymous09/29/14
It may follow....
....that all too familiar pattern, but no one can deny it is a satisfying finish to a wierd story. 4*
Sorry, I'm not going away, and neither are my 'finishes'. Still posting a large backlog that I've built up in the last few months. You'll be reading my finishes and adding to the comment count for a couple of weeks, until the backlog is drained.
Most are shorter solutions, so you'll get to vent your bile after only a page or so. I appreciate the comments, even the ignorant ones. Especially the ignorant ones, they make me smile. Thanks.
I think three more are in the system already, and several more will be posted in the next week or so. Enjoy. :-)
by
Anonymous09/29/14
Tend to agree
FTDS, why don't you just write your own stories? I have read several of your poor attempts and the fact is you aren't as good as the originals in most cases.
Well written as usual. You changed the story slightly and I loved it.
You also brought out the boo birds. Good on you.
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Anonymous09/29/14
Do not go away love most of your stories
Those naysayer( negative comment) for most part are unjustified. That what you get from anonymous people who are not well read and just like to tear down. They offer no postive or corrective points of view. Just don't pay any attention to them . For most readers you do a great job , so why do those naysayers read your stories over and over again. Just sick people if you ask me! Liked the finish , he waited to long to stop it but he keep his marriage together. Better than going to court and losing a ton of money to lawyers and alimony .
Your opinions do not matter. Your sole purpose is to fill the comments section with mindless filler. You guys are even more worthless than the hapless cuckolds which frequent this story section. Of course, if you give yourselves an identity we *might* take you more seriously...
The husband was not a wimp, yes he might have stopped it earlier, but by waiting as long as he did there was less reason for his wife or the neighbor to try to claim that nothing wrong had been done.
To give the neighbor a choice of either give the blowjob himself or from his wife?
Genius!
by
Anonymous09/29/14
two part comment
@Frasnost I really agreed with your original comment on this story. FTDS DOES have a lot of anonymous fans. I think that it is obvious that FTDS mines stories that DO feature so-called "wimp or cuck" husbands, yet HE finds enjoyment and pleasure in providing readers with a POV that allows for change in that character, as well as the character of the wife, or perhaps even the cheating-with partner. We all know that too many stories allow these "wimpy" hubby's to remain frozen in inaction, and rarely to ever allow for natural consequences to ensue which would force lessons to be learned, and mistakes to be rectified. True enough, many of today's critiques blast FTDS for simply choosing a story that has the plot revolve around a voyeur-cuck event. These people miss the fact that FTDS writes (in his own words) a "solution" for that disturbing circumstance. Even if his "improved upon" characters aren't portrayed as perfect, they do seem to emerge from the conflict better than they started, and unlikely to repeat the same mistakes. For me, that IS why FTDS is one of my favorites. And the job he does is hard, takes a lot of work, and like ANY author here, deserves more appreciation for his contributions than he gets. It sounded to me like this was what you were trying to remind readers of; those who might be weighing in negatively.
But then...........
You just HAD to attack commenters in a second comment based only upon their anon status, instead of the comment they wrote. You decided to group ALL anons into one category. Clearly you think that they are all the same person, right? You ignore the fact that a few "NAMED" commenters didn't give FTDS the fair shake here, either. Instead it must only be anons whose opinions "don't matter". Forget that ALL voting is anonymous, and that anonymous readers make up the largest reading demographic, as well as voting audience. As a thoughtful anon, I wish those biased attitudes WEREN'T propagated, but at LEAST, please use common sense when judging others unfairly, lest your own ignorance be revealed.
Back to you FTDS,
Thanks again for "saving" this story! I am happy to hear that there are more in the pipeline coming soon. While NONE of these stories will EVER appeal to EVERYBODY, I feel like what you do (with a story like this one), might just make it a little more palatable for the majority, than it ever was before. Still and always a big fan!
This one wasn't that great. Hubby might not have been a wimp, but he did let it go too far. There's a point where if Wifey doesn't stop it, Hubby should have. When she didn't tell Asshole NO! when he started sucking her tits and fingering her, Hubby should have stepped in right then and there. Even IF Wifey could prove her fidelity after that, EX-Friend should have been banned for life. ANY... "man", and I use that term loosely, who would betray a friend by trying to seduce his wife, is not a man at all, but an Asshole who thinks he's an "alpha male". Sorry, but "alpha" isn't a synonym for Asshole. Those kinds of "alphas" aren't real men at all, but scared little pissants who have to get their validation by trying to take another man's wife.
My wife and I have dealt with an asshole like Ron before. The difference here is, I didn't have to do anything, since she stopped him cold. All I had to do was make certain that he found his way out. lol
Ok, enough of that. /steps down off the soapbox.
3 Stars. It was ok, but could have been handled much better.
and I think you exceeded yourself from past FTDS stories. Gave it 5 *'s on the ole erection meter.
It was really unclear that "Pete" had dialed Pam on the phone when they and us readers thought he was calling the bookie again. First I had to figure out who he was talking to. Then I figured out it was Ron's wife, but thought she had just come up on the edge of the patio. Finally figured out it was Pete calling Ron's missus asking for a blow job. Now that was classic.
One other thing, Hubby smacked Lisa's ass hard with the belt (she deserved it!) and he asked her once if she had cheated on him before. I would have thought he would have yelled "I don't believe you! Before today, I never believed you would fuck around with another man!" Asking her that a couple more times, adding to her humiliation. Again, a good 'un!
It did not have the same tension as PTrembers original
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Anonymous09/29/14
4*s
Better than Wrongful Revenge Ch.2. I felt like these people were my neighbors. I was more interested in the resolution. It had more emotional impact.
Good job, thank you. Two stories by you in one day, amazing!
I'm glad to see you posting again. I was just wondering recently if you had anything new. Interesting way to have the husband react. I wonder if he would have gone through with Ron doing the payback...
I have to agree with the main character, it shouldn't be the husbands job to save the wife from non-rape situations. Wives need to stay in control of their lives just like they expect their men to do. The word cuckold is so overused here. Watching to see how she'd handle the situation does not make him a cuck. There was no intercourse, no chance for unwanted pregnancy, cheating isn't necessarily cucking.
Anondiot, wtf are you talking about...
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Anonymous09/30/14
frasnost
Go fuck yourself.
FTDS writes a different ending, but the original author has not changed their viewpoint.
These stories sucked to begin with and a different ending does nothing to change that fact.
1*
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Anonymous09/30/14
2.5 * only
Dear FTDS,
Respectfully, Sir, you are not Denzel Washington or The Equilizer!
You are a self-styled crusider to protect some men from making life choices different than yours. In that regard you are ideologically blinded.
In literature, including erotic literature, characters are complex, fluid and multi-layeted. You complitely missed the husband's character as outlined by Ch. 1's author.
The husband was discovering his voyeur side that he hitherto was just vaguely aware of.
Some people claim that those who like to watch their five with another man are latent homosexuals. Perhaps they are, but the operative word is LATENT! HOWEVER BLACKMAILING ANOTHER MAN TO SUCK YOUR DICK A A HOMOSEXUAL ACT. PERIOD.
Respectfully, Sir, this Ch. 2 has nothing to do with the original story: your version sucks, the original story rocks.
I liked the ending to the story. I seriously doubt he would have taken the blowjob from Ron, but it was a good bluff to give him his just desserts.
I like your stories. What I like most is that I never know how they're going to end. You are not strictly a BTB writer or Reconciliation writer. You keep the characters consistent and you deliver a well rounded story. Good Job.p
This story seems to have caused a bit of a stir in the melting pot of opinions !
Problem with opinions is just like arse holes, everybody has one !
Some stories that FTDS writes a sequel to tbe original characters did not jave much depth, or many layers to them. So as a writer if you try to add more layers and depth you hope to try and keep the characters true to what the initial author had in visaged.
So thete eill be characters when developing them in the sequel msy drift from what the original suthor may have cadt them as, I think this is a problem in trying to evolve a character.
The comment by anonymous reader, "In that regard you are ideologically blinded.
In literature, including erotic literature, characters are complex, fluid and multi-layeted. You complitely missed the husband's character as outlined by Ch. 1's author.
The husband was discovering his voyeur side that he hitherto was just vaguely aware of.
Some people claim that those who like to watch their five with another man are latent homosexuals"
I think the husband msy have had a fantasy and like all fantasies the reality is not wuite the same.
Perhaps this husband may have a fantasy and when seeing his wife with the neighbour he changed his mind. Thinking though whst might happen to his marriage if this act eas to continue !
I think FTDS has gone down another road of thought and emotions that the husband could feel.
Obviously stands for Feeble Talentless Dick Sucker.
The leech strikes again.
Unable to craft anything of worth on his own out of whole cloth he needs the crutch of a good story albeit unfinished to get the attention he so desperately craves.
It is too bad the accusation that FTDS never writes an original story was posted by anonymous. Otherwise we could direct him/her to the long list of stories including some very entertaining original works.
for example:
http://www.literotica.com/s/nope-ill-take-o ption-three
I like the consensual, loving sharing lovers tryst, affairs.
Damm dud you know how to wrap these degenerate stories up. Tried to find some of the originals but no luck.
appreciate your tying up stories that should have continued or been finished, even when it's not always 'just how it would happen in my head.'
reminds me of my frustration when 'Tales of a Bored Housewife' stopped, and 'A Cop's Wife' by Rusty Shackelford, or 'A Wife, A Slut, An Addict' by rickspindrift, the latter right here at LE, and by title something you would expect to be three chapters...
English
Heh.
I don't think I would have ever had anything to do with the "friend" again. Other then that I can see this resolution working.
Please stop lying
Why do you lie to your readers with every story you write. You promise us "no voluntary cucks, or whiny simpering wimps." Yet every main character you write is a wimpy cuck just like this guy. And the guy in your last story. And the one before that. And so on and so on. Please remove that line from your preface cause it just ain't true.
LOVE IS STRANGE BUT
cheating and swinging is a fetish addiction. TK U MLJ LV NV
I Agree
A clean break would have been best. At first he was excited watching the wife and the friend. He recovered, however, and did what he had to do. Good tale.
Cuck Crap!
1 STAR- The scores speak for themselves.
Author, you write to make husbands wimp.
Quit pretending you don't portrait husbands as wimps (you do!). You are as bad as the majority of limp-wrist authors posting here.
Enjoyed it
Certainly better than the original.
I have to agree with the other comments, you made him a voluntary cuck here. He got excited by her cheating so it's only a matter of time before he has here suck off some other guy for his pleasure......
Ignore the haters
He gave her every chance to stop before she went too far. She didn't. He stopped it, even though he let it go a little further than I would have, and he gave her notice that she had no more chances left.
This is MUCH better done
than the ending just released to Wrongul Revenge.
Damn,
what a piece of crap! His neighbor tries to do his wife, is caught in the act, and they're still buddy, buddy?
I almost always like your endings....
I almost always like your endings....This one is no exception...he was right...If he had stoped it in the begining, the "friend" would have keep trying, and he would not have a break anymore...If he forgave his wife, why not forgive his friend? Forgive is not forget...
CUCK alert!
It isn't about what she was caught doing,
it is about what she WASN'T caught doing.
Now she knows she just needs to be more discrete.
Charlton Heston
Fuck, I hate characters who think they're Charlton Heston.
The mechanics? Good. But...
Not this old boy. I'd be hard pressed to forgive the wife. It's possible, but not likely. She'd have her work cut out for her.
The "friend" is a whole different ball game. After I stomped a mud hole in his ass and walked it dry, he'd be in the rearview mirror. Buh-bye!
Pitiful
Stop pretending you're a man and go back to your closet.
Shortsighted commenters
I like the idea of keeping the friend close. What's the old saying, keep your friends close and your enemies closer? The neighbor is punished by having something he wants so badly constantly waved under his nose, a reminder of what he almost had but never will. At the same time, neighbor boy has to watch his own wife get all chummy with the guy she gave a blowjob to, in front of him.
Shortsighted commenters talking about kicking the neighbor's ass, having nothing to do with him, etc. How foolish! Kick his ass and risk jail? Why? It's so much better to keep your eye on him, unless you plan to move away, and punish him with a 1000 little cuts. Wake up and smell the coffee, oh ye of the ignorant short-sighted comments, there's a right way and a wrong way to get revenge. Welcome to the right way.
strange tale
no way would I have my dick out and be hard watching my wife cheat. A gun or
knife , maybe a bat or something that would cause him pain but not my dick.
friends after, are you nuts? nice try but not a real life tale.
Poor ending
The guy lets it get that far and then reacts that negatively? I don't buy it. He would have stopped it earlier if he was that opposed to the situation.
My 2 Cents
To all those commentators who dumped on FTDS for creating a wimp husband. He didn't the original author did. FTDS took over after the husband went back on the patio and slammed the door so you people are wrong. This ending was consistent with the original and the ending was a fine finish to the damn story
worse and worse
I thought the last one was bad. It was painfully formulaic but at least the husband wasn't a voluntary cuck. I hope you get your mojo back soon.
A worthy denouement
To a tale that has been left unresolved for too long. Naturally, I like FTDS's darker interpretation of the unfinished tales he tackles, especially when they skirt along the edge of pain infliction because that is what the cheaters deserve. The wayward wife in this tale would most likely have gotten away with a lot more if the author of the original continued the story. Luckily, FTDS gave the story a fitting resolution which, although may be inconsistent with PTremer's voyeuristic predilections, gives the Hubby his balls back.
5*
please go away!
FTDS, please go away! Your attempt to finish others stories is lame and content in others as arthuors...you show no respect to them nor their intended readers...please, for the sake of readers here quit doing these arthuors a 'favor' ...it just looks like you think are smarter, better at writing their story, which is dumb! If you don't like their story leave them a bad review, like this, but move on 'cause your not that good...you score btw is -10... now go away!
It may follow....
....that all too familiar pattern, but no one can deny it is a satisfying finish to a wierd story. 4*
LOL at last anonymous
Sorry, I'm not going away, and neither are my 'finishes'. Still posting a large backlog that I've built up in the last few months. You'll be reading my finishes and adding to the comment count for a couple of weeks, until the backlog is drained.
Most are shorter solutions, so you'll get to vent your bile after only a page or so. I appreciate the comments, even the ignorant ones. Especially the ignorant ones, they make me smile. Thanks.
I think three more are in the system already, and several more will be posted in the next week or so. Enjoy. :-)
Tend to agree
FTDS, why don't you just write your own stories? I have read several of your poor attempts and the fact is you aren't as good as the originals in most cases.
This one sucked.
Glad you are back
Well written as usual. You changed the story slightly and I loved it.
You also brought out the boo birds. Good on you.
Do not go away love most of your stories
Those naysayer( negative comment) for most part are unjustified. That what you get from anonymous people who are not well read and just like to tear down. They offer no postive or corrective points of view. Just don't pay any attention to them . For most readers you do a great job , so why do those naysayers read your stories over and over again. Just sick people if you ask me! Liked the finish , he waited to long to stop it but he keep his marriage together. Better than going to court and losing a ton of money to lawyers and alimony .
FAO: Anon commenters
Your opinions do not matter. Your sole purpose is to fill the comments section with mindless filler. You guys are even more worthless than the hapless cuckolds which frequent this story section. Of course, if you give yourselves an identity we *might* take you more seriously...
pretty good
The husband was not a wimp, yes he might have stopped it earlier, but by waiting as long as he did there was less reason for his wife or the neighbor to try to claim that nothing wrong had been done.
To give the neighbor a choice of either give the blowjob himself or from his wife?
Genius!
two part comment
@Frasnost I really agreed with your original comment on this story. FTDS DOES have a lot of anonymous fans. I think that it is obvious that FTDS mines stories that DO feature so-called "wimp or cuck" husbands, yet HE finds enjoyment and pleasure in providing readers with a POV that allows for change in that character, as well as the character of the wife, or perhaps even the cheating-with partner. We all know that too many stories allow these "wimpy" hubby's to remain frozen in inaction, and rarely to ever allow for natural consequences to ensue which would force lessons to be learned, and mistakes to be rectified. True enough, many of today's critiques blast FTDS for simply choosing a story that has the plot revolve around a voyeur-cuck event. These people miss the fact that FTDS writes (in his own words) a "solution" for that disturbing circumstance. Even if his "improved upon" characters aren't portrayed as perfect, they do seem to emerge from the conflict better than they started, and unlikely to repeat the same mistakes. For me, that IS why FTDS is one of my favorites. And the job he does is hard, takes a lot of work, and like ANY author here, deserves more appreciation for his contributions than he gets. It sounded to me like this was what you were trying to remind readers of; those who might be weighing in negatively.
But then...........
You just HAD to attack commenters in a second comment based only upon their anon status, instead of the comment they wrote. You decided to group ALL anons into one category. Clearly you think that they are all the same person, right? You ignore the fact that a few "NAMED" commenters didn't give FTDS the fair shake here, either. Instead it must only be anons whose opinions "don't matter". Forget that ALL voting is anonymous, and that anonymous readers make up the largest reading demographic, as well as voting audience. As a thoughtful anon, I wish those biased attitudes WEREN'T propagated, but at LEAST, please use common sense when judging others unfairly, lest your own ignorance be revealed.
Back to you FTDS,
Thanks again for "saving" this story! I am happy to hear that there are more in the pipeline coming soon. While NONE of these stories will EVER appeal to EVERYBODY, I feel like what you do (with a story like this one), might just make it a little more palatable for the majority, than it ever was before. Still and always a big fan!
As good as the other one was...
This one wasn't that great. Hubby might not have been a wimp, but he did let it go too far. There's a point where if Wifey doesn't stop it, Hubby should have. When she didn't tell Asshole NO! when he started sucking her tits and fingering her, Hubby should have stepped in right then and there. Even IF Wifey could prove her fidelity after that, EX-Friend should have been banned for life. ANY... "man", and I use that term loosely, who would betray a friend by trying to seduce his wife, is not a man at all, but an Asshole who thinks he's an "alpha male". Sorry, but "alpha" isn't a synonym for Asshole. Those kinds of "alphas" aren't real men at all, but scared little pissants who have to get their validation by trying to take another man's wife.
My wife and I have dealt with an asshole like Ron before. The difference here is, I didn't have to do anything, since she stopped him cold. All I had to do was make certain that he found his way out. lol
Ok, enough of that. /steps down off the soapbox.
3 Stars. It was ok, but could have been handled much better.
Excellent...again!
and I think you exceeded yourself from past FTDS stories. Gave it 5 *'s on the ole erection meter.
It was really unclear that "Pete" had dialed Pam on the phone when they and us readers thought he was calling the bookie again. First I had to figure out who he was talking to. Then I figured out it was Ron's wife, but thought she had just come up on the edge of the patio. Finally figured out it was Pete calling Ron's missus asking for a blow job. Now that was classic.
One other thing, Hubby smacked Lisa's ass hard with the belt (she deserved it!) and he asked her once if she had cheated on him before. I would have thought he would have yelled "I don't believe you! Before today, I never believed you would fuck around with another man!" Asking her that a couple more times, adding to her humiliation. Again, a good 'un!
An OK ending
It did not have the same tension as PTrembers original
4*s
Better than Wrongful Revenge Ch.2. I felt like these people were my neighbors. I was more interested in the resolution. It had more emotional impact.
Good job, thank you. Two stories by you in one day, amazing!
AMerryMan
FTDS Rocks
Five stars on this one for sure. Well done.
Is Iron Dragon a fucking IDIOT?
Shut the fuck UP moron. You don't have a wife and your ex wife is a round-heeled slut, you FAT stupid cunt.
I'm glad to see you posting again. I was just wondering recently if you had anything new. Interesting way to have the husband react. I wonder if he would have gone through with Ron doing the payback...
I have to agree with the main character, it shouldn't be the husbands job to save the wife from non-rape situations. Wives need to stay in control of their lives just like they expect their men to do. The word cuckold is so overused here. Watching to see how she'd handle the situation does not make him a cuck. There was no intercourse, no chance for unwanted pregnancy, cheating isn't necessarily cucking.
Anondiot, wtf are you talking about...
frasnost
Go fuck yourself.
FTDS writes a different ending, but the original author has not changed their viewpoint.
These stories sucked to begin with and a different ending does nothing to change that fact.
1*
2.5 * only
Dear FTDS,
Respectfully, Sir, you are not Denzel Washington or The Equilizer!
You are a self-styled crusider to protect some men from making life choices different than yours. In that regard you are ideologically blinded.
In literature, including erotic literature, characters are complex, fluid and multi-layeted. You complitely missed the husband's character as outlined by Ch. 1's author.
The husband was discovering his voyeur side that he hitherto was just vaguely aware of.
Some people claim that those who like to watch their five with another man are latent homosexuals. Perhaps they are, but the operative word is LATENT! HOWEVER BLACKMAILING ANOTHER MAN TO SUCK YOUR DICK A A HOMOSEXUAL ACT. PERIOD.
Respectfully, Sir, this Ch. 2 has nothing to do with the original story: your version sucks, the original story rocks.
much better
"5"
I liked it
I liked the ending to the story. I seriously doubt he would have taken the blowjob from Ron, but it was a good bluff to give him his just desserts.
I like your stories. What I like most is that I never know how they're going to end. You are not strictly a BTB writer or Reconciliation writer. You keep the characters consistent and you deliver a well rounded story. Good Job.p
Stopped at the man sucking his cock
Sorry, that's just pathetic, if your willing to let that happen then who cares about a slut wife?
Opinions
Another good story from FTDS.
This story seems to have caused a bit of a stir in the melting pot of opinions !
Problem with opinions is just like arse holes, everybody has one !
Some stories that FTDS writes a sequel to tbe original characters did not jave much depth, or many layers to them. So as a writer if you try to add more layers and depth you hope to try and keep the characters true to what the initial author had in visaged.
So thete eill be characters when developing them in the sequel msy drift from what the original suthor may have cadt them as, I think this is a problem in trying to evolve a character.
The comment by anonymous reader, "In that regard you are ideologically blinded.
In literature, including erotic literature, characters are complex, fluid and multi-layeted. You complitely missed the husband's character as outlined by Ch. 1's author.
The husband was discovering his voyeur side that he hitherto was just vaguely aware of.
Some people claim that those who like to watch their five with another man are latent homosexuals"
I think the husband msy have had a fantasy and like all fantasies the reality is not wuite the same.
Perhaps this husband may have a fantasy and when seeing his wife with the neighbour he changed his mind. Thinking though whst might happen to his marriage if this act eas to continue !
I think FTDS has gone down another road of thought and emotions that the husband could feel.
IMO, there is nothing wrong with that.
A very plausible
ending to the original story. Thank you, FTDS!
FTDS
Obviously stands for Feeble Talentless Dick Sucker.
The leech strikes again.
Unable to craft anything of worth on his own out of whole cloth he needs the crutch of a good story albeit unfinished to get the attention he so desperately craves.
Write something of your own you hack.
A good finish to an unresolved situation
It is too bad the accusation that FTDS never writes an original story was posted by anonymous. Otherwise we could direct him/her to the long list of stories including some very entertaining original works.
for example:
http://www.literotica.com/s/nope-ill-take-o ption-three
I really like your style
I like the consensual, loving sharing lovers tryst, affairs.
Damm dud you know how to wrap these degenerate stories up. Tried to find some of the originals but no luck.
as ever, thanks!
appreciate your tying up stories that should have continued or been finished, even when it's not always 'just how it would happen in my head.'
reminds me of my frustration when 'Tales of a Bored Housewife' stopped, and 'A Cop's Wife' by Rusty Shackelford, or 'A Wife, A Slut, An Addict' by rickspindrift, the latter right here at LE, and by title something you would expect to be three chapters...
oh well...
keep up the great writing!
RA
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