All Comments on 'Prototype F-96 Pt. 03'

by NemoHoes

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Next adventure

I must say, I can't wait for the next chapter with an ending like that.

searchingforperfectionsearchingforperfectionover 9 years ago
Next chapter?

How can there be a next chapter, when the hero is dead? Check out the damage done by the Maenads.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
i think he is gonna die

I think 8 girls plus beth are going to fuck him to death and in his corpse will be an eternal non-removable grin

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
GET AN EDITOR

The leader of a school is a Principal, not principle. If something is in great quantity you can use the word 'too.' As in "It was too much." not 'to much.' Many other annoying mistakes in your story, besides being extremely juvenile.

Shadowforce1Shadowforce1over 9 years ago
Great Story

Good Story. Want to see where you go from here. I don't know what that Anon is talking about an editor, sure there was tiny mistakes but you can read through them.

NemoHoesNemoHoesover 9 years agoAuthor
Thanks

Thanks for all the positive feedback, I was starting to feel discouraged due to some select comments. As for searchingforperfection, i have no fucking clue what your talking about.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Keep with it

Nothing interrupted my reading of your stories. I think you are doing a great job, I like the humor and fun incorporated in the story too.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
great stuff!

Good work I'm loving the series so far, couple of spelling mistakes, but apart from that it's pretty great.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Needs editorial effort, but a great....

....high school stroke fantasy story.

Delightful!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Good

Good job keep it up

LUSTYWHEELSLUSTYWHEELSover 9 years ago
good

The milk filled over huge tits effect should fade after a week or so while leaving the crazy high sex drive behind.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

More, Please! Also, more milk drinking fun

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
PLEASE

u need to make more

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Not bad

Not bad, your a decent writer and you have good story here. Can't wait for da next part.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

When might you give us a new chapter?

lawteyfllawteyflover 9 years ago
Great series!

glad you are writing here on Literotica! Keep it up!

phoenix23ninjaphoenix23ninjaalmost 8 years ago
Lol

That ending though

I would love to be him in the next part

To help, contact me at phoenix23ninja@gmail.com

Please mention this story when contacting me

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