what secrets lay buried in cellars, closets and minds. TK U MLJ LV NV
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Anonymous10/03/14
Yes
what is buried and hidden in back of the closets and of course the mind... Some men do not want to know what is back there. Other guess. and some of us know... thanks for the memories
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Anonymous10/03/14
# 1
Pleasure in divorce and humiliation ?? Yep # 1 crap
A little early exposition would make this tale easier to follow. Sorry, but I don't want to read a short-story three times, taking and comparing notes on the re-reads, just to understand what it is about. It DID start to jell towards the end.
This IS the swinging category! Read the description.
As for the story, it was certainly different, I'll give you that. The entire premise of the ex-husband having some sort of threesome BDSM session with his ex-wife and her new boyfriend was a bit too bizarre for my taste, but that's just me. I gave you three stars for the effort.
Thank you for the helpful comments. Yes, the story is supposed to be the introduction to a longer story. We hope what follows will develop into something more satisfying when read as a whole. We will try to improve in response to helpful feedback.
We do wonder why some people read and comment on themes they obviously do not like. No one forces them to read their stories, instead they must choose to do so. Perhaps they are stimulated by the stories and must post negative comments to make up for their impure thoughts.
Good short story. A spouse starts to realize the true extent of a betrayal. The opposite of arousing!
Could have been better as part of a longer , more complex story.
Your story is well constructed, because it makes me wonder what is real and what is fantasy. Is there any truth within this story or is it all from your imagination? That adds an aspect of intrigue to a mind-bending erotic story. Therefore, I loved it.
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Anonymous02/07/15
Just a lifestyle choice, that will have no impact on the children. Lie much?
Fucked up adults is understandable. Fucked up adults with children is regrettable. Celebrating the perverse lifestyle choices of fucked up adults with children is, really fucked up. If you and your fans get off on fucked up people fucking up children's lives, that's sad.
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Anonymous04/03/15
Just another sissy wimp coward and a heartless CUNT
WHO CAN FATHOM
what secrets lay buried in cellars, closets and minds. TK U MLJ LV NV
Yes
what is buried and hidden in back of the closets and of course the mind... Some men do not want to know what is back there. Other guess. and some of us know... thanks for the memories
# 1
Pleasure in divorce and humiliation ?? Yep # 1 crap
wow knock them out
light em on fire and leave
another chapter would be nice
More coming
More chapters are coming.
My favourite line is"multiple sexual couplings"
you are an idiot 1
Is there an ending?
I dont like how it ended,if that is your idea of a complete story, then it sucked.
Liked the writing, the dialogue, but damn finish the story.
Awkward story development
A little early exposition would make this tale easier to follow. Sorry, but I don't want to read a short-story three times, taking and comparing notes on the re-reads, just to understand what it is about. It DID start to jell towards the end.
To the Anon
This IS the swinging category! Read the description.
As for the story, it was certainly different, I'll give you that. The entire premise of the ex-husband having some sort of threesome BDSM session with his ex-wife and her new boyfriend was a bit too bizarre for my taste, but that's just me. I gave you three stars for the effort.
Thak you
Thank you for the helpful comments. Yes, the story is supposed to be the introduction to a longer story. We hope what follows will develop into something more satisfying when read as a whole. We will try to improve in response to helpful feedback.
We do wonder why some people read and comment on themes they obviously do not like. No one forces them to read their stories, instead they must choose to do so. Perhaps they are stimulated by the stories and must post negative comments to make up for their impure thoughts.
sucks
Period
3*s
Good short story. A spouse starts to realize the true extent of a betrayal. The opposite of arousing!
Could have been better as part of a longer , more complex story.
AMerryMan
Intriguing
Your story is well constructed, because it makes me wonder what is real and what is fantasy. Is there any truth within this story or is it all from your imagination? That adds an aspect of intrigue to a mind-bending erotic story. Therefore, I loved it.
Just a lifestyle choice, that will have no impact on the children. Lie much?
Fucked up adults is understandable. Fucked up adults with children is regrettable. Celebrating the perverse lifestyle choices of fucked up adults with children is, really fucked up. If you and your fans get off on fucked up people fucking up children's lives, that's sad.
Just another sissy wimp coward and a heartless CUNT
boring and pathetic!
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