Outlasting Love

WHAT THE FUCK was that? oh and FYI, the word is THOUGH! Write the fucking word.

This story is SHIT.

And since SHIT comes from assholes, this fool author is an asshole. Got to Hell and burn, asshole.

ummm,.........WTF was that?!?!?

I honestly have no idea what the hell I just read!

Was the tailor a serial killer? Were this about cannabalism? Some Silence of the Lambs thing where he makes clothes out of corpses?

Whatever the fuck you thought this was, (and I admit I didn't understand it), know this:
I don't know what it was, but I sure as hell know what it wasn't! This is no loving wife story. Maybe try horror, but before you repost in the PROPER category, this POS is so hard to follow, that I bet even horror fans would be confused. Figure out your story first, and may be then you could clue in the readers, huh?

This was obviously the product of a deeply disturbed mind, so may be you'd be better off forgetting about this story as it gets pulled, and focusing on taking your meds, and getting some therapy.

WOW! (and not in a good way!)

This crap made no sense.

I was totally lost from the beginning.

I'm not sure a great editor could save this mess.

Did you even re-read this or have someone else proof read it for you? As it stands, this is unintelligible drivel. It's unreadable. I can't believe anyone would give it even one star. UGH!

Just...

Just an horror story passed in an asylum...Not a LW story...

Did you kill

your editor. What the hell is this mess.

I suspect

this is fanfic, about the "Outcast" and "Outcast: Whistleblower" video game.

I have not played the game, and will not rate this.

Green-something

What

Rubbish.

Author here

What exactly do the people who commented negatively believe a 'loving wife' is? Categorically. Why am I being asked to move the story to a different category? I'm confused by that criticism. I understand being critiqued for misspellings and the like, but I'm unsure why the category is an issue.

Oh, and Green117

Yes it is a fanfic for Outlast, that's why it's entitled: Outlasting Love.

@CandiCame

Sorry about misspelling the game - in fact that was the second attempt to do the comment, since I somehow lost the first.

If you are going to write something that has something as out of the ordinary as a horror video game as a context, it might help if you said so in an authors note before the text. Most of us have no experience with the game, and a coy reference in the title really doesn't help.

I found out what this one was about by searching on Mount Massive, and skipping the references to the real mountain. Certainly "Outlasting" isn't going to get you to any reference to the game.

Sure - annoying your readers can be fun, but this isn't the way to do it.

Green-something

two things

1) This seems more properly Erotic Horror

2) Weary means tired
Wary means nervous or untrusting
Did you mean that he was tired of the doctor?
Or that he was not trusting the doctor to be competent?

Author Again

I meant tired of the doctor. Waylon had dealings with him before and it did not go well.

And I think this may have been more obscure than I thought. Outlast is the topselling game on Steam right now and it never occurred to me that it wouldn't be well known. It was not my intention to 'annoy the readers'. I've posted 2 other videogame fanfics, in different categories and didn't experience this kind of confusion. I would not voluntarily bring my star rating down. I've consulted the forums on stories that fit in more than one category, and came away with the conclusion that when a story fits into more than one category, it should be put in the category it most represents and then tagged appropriately. Since this story is primarily about a loving wife, I thought this was the best category. I then tagged it with "horror" "gore" "psychopathy" and "outlast fanfiction". So I'm unsure why you had to google it when it was listed on the tags, quite clearly, right there on the right. I did not expect this type of reaction.

tags

are at the end of the story - next to the comments.

Again, an authors' note before the story, before people get to the end, might help.

All from me. Good luck.

Green-something

Does anyone know

How to add this author's note?

weary wary

weary vs. wary
Why I wondered was all the forgoing statements about her nearly dieing from surgery that they would not allow to be done by the same "doctor"
Certainly reason to be wary, as in worried, calling him a butcher and a madman.

(Though coming from cannibalistic serial killers that's rich.)

Outlast fan fic?

i think this is fanfiction for a video game called Outlast (ok game, I bought it last time it was on sale at steam)

Just...I dunno....

...bizarre!

3*s

Very nice. Creative and original !
Who would have thought about a village of mentally challenged survivalist!!

I think??

A bit difficult to fathom. 3*s for encouragement.


AMerryMan

I'm a huge fan of Gluskin, and love the little touches, like how Way has been so consumed he thinks of his life before as a "tomboy". There are a lot of spelling problems, but it doesn't really distract from the overall tone. This is right up there with your Zelda fic. Love your alternate endings!