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A bit too quick of a wrap up but ...
Overall, WOW, this was the single best thing I have read on this site ... not only was it hot, dirty stuff to start, but it had an awesome, happy ending ... I feel like I've just watch a movie or something, though a movie would have been much longer (which makes this better, since that probably isn't obvrious by my wording) ...
Condensing the entire ending into two paragraphs sucked a little though ... especially when as soon as the "her mom confessed everything" line came up, I could tell exactly how it was going to end right away, but other than that it was absolutely AMAZING ... expand on the ending a little and then maybe drag it out or something and I think you would have yourself the single best story on here ... granted, I've only been reading the stories on here for a few hours, but I don't expect I will find an overall better story, at all ...
Excellent work!
Quick finish
Agreed, this finish was a bit too tidy and convenient, with too little tense sexual play. ..
It wraps up cutely and cleanly, like a movie finish, though the author has fashioned a hot story line and could carry it quite a bit further. .. I totally enjoyed Ch's 1 & 2, then accepted Ch 3 with less excitement.
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