I love the addition of Janya. I'm surprised that he didn't need to get help from his little blue friends before he did. The ending has me a little worried about what's going to happen in the next chapter, though.
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Anonymous10/13/14
Interesting Story
I really got interested in this story by just reading it. By the title, I passed it up a couple of times and just read it. I am so into this that I would like to read the next chapter and hope that there will be no one taken out of the story. I liked all of the characters, including the bad boy son. Waiting for the next read.
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Anonymous10/20/14
Please make this an accident, not a fatality.
Please make this an accident, not a fatality.
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Anonymous10/22/14
Story turned downhill for me after Janya joined
I understand that Clayton is a dick, but seducing his wife was the thing that turned me off for the story. There was no logical explanation as to why it is she cheated on Clay. It is assumed that their marriage was already in the rocks due to her cheating so easily. However, her receiving the black eye was a clearer explanation of their relationship. You should have introduced the problems along with the abuse to sell her cheating more. While others were turned on, the plot hole ruined it for me. Hopefully, the death of one of the three girls (fingers crossed) will bring me back to the story.
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Anonymous05/08/16
Really!?
Dude you fucking ruined it with Janya, should have kept her out of it, I get he might be a dick but that doesn't justify cheating, and yarn he didn't ruin the marriage just fucked her before it ended right??? Psh, I usually like your stories but 1 star on this one man.
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Anonymous08/21/16
Downhill
The story kind of turned downhill after the mother and daughter decided to cause trouble in their son/brothers marriage......he did seem idiotic....and the implied reason that followed seems contrived........did he deserve that... Not really convinced....dropping the story here
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Nice story
I've been reading this series all along. I do hope the accident at the end doesn't prove fatal to any of the main characters.
Great series!!
I love the addition of Janya. I'm surprised that he didn't need to get help from his little blue friends before he did. The ending has me a little worried about what's going to happen in the next chapter, though.
Interesting Story
I really got interested in this story by just reading it. By the title, I passed it up a couple of times and just read it. I am so into this that I would like to read the next chapter and hope that there will be no one taken out of the story. I liked all of the characters, including the bad boy son. Waiting for the next read.
Please make this an accident, not a fatality.
Please make this an accident, not a fatality.
Story turned downhill for me after Janya joined
I understand that Clayton is a dick, but seducing his wife was the thing that turned me off for the story. There was no logical explanation as to why it is she cheated on Clay. It is assumed that their marriage was already in the rocks due to her cheating so easily. However, her receiving the black eye was a clearer explanation of their relationship. You should have introduced the problems along with the abuse to sell her cheating more. While others were turned on, the plot hole ruined it for me. Hopefully, the death of one of the three girls (fingers crossed) will bring me back to the story.
Really!?
Dude you fucking ruined it with Janya, should have kept her out of it, I get he might be a dick but that doesn't justify cheating, and yarn he didn't ruin the marriage just fucked her before it ended right??? Psh, I usually like your stories but 1 star on this one man.
Downhill
The story kind of turned downhill after the mother and daughter decided to cause trouble in their son/brothers marriage......he did seem idiotic....and the implied reason that followed seems contrived........did he deserve that... Not really convinced....dropping the story here
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