Purely Sinful

Epic tale!

This was a wonderful, epic story!
Very well written, would have been wonderful even without the sex aspects!

I wish someone makes a movie out of it!

Gaming lore meeting erotica

As a gaming lore nerd I see a lot of Diablo potential in there :D. Absolutely love it. I'd love it even more if you can turn it into some kind of erotic fan fiction for Diablo. Might not be original but what the hell? :D. No need for a movie. The gaming industry is already far ahead in terms of imagination. For the non-gamer, check out diablo.wikia.com

purely sinful

Your writing skills and imagination are unsurpassable !! My only regret is that the story wasn't much longer !!!! Fantastic !!!!!!!!!

I think the sex might've been the worst part.

Lots of switching up on activities (the dom scene is my favourite) but they always felt very short compared the story, (which was pretty great)

great story

This was an entertaining and twisted story.

What a story

Loved, loved, wishing this story was much longer. Great job.
Read a lot of great stories on Literotica but this was by far the best of the best.

Good Story, Not Erotic

Very entertaining story. Didn't think the "erotic" part of it really applied. The only sex scene I found remotely erotic was when they kissed, once, with some actual emotional connection. Otherwise the sex was just porn--kinky/unusual/imaginative sex acts, sure, but with no emotional connection between the characters. I would have preferred to see Zafira humanized a lot earlier and to have seen her engage in a long, emotionally satisfying sex scene with Cole, but that was pretty much left to our imaginations.

Great, great, great!! Why are you not published? LOVED IT!! :-)

Loved!

An unexpected beautifully written piece. Would love some contact info from the author, maybe a Facebook page or a Twitter handle? Will definitely be looking for more from Rozalin_0123.

Kindred spirits

Chicago! Porny sex! Badass women! This is bread and butter for our stories, so you had me right at the start. This novel was insanely well plotted, action packed, and honestly really moving. The sex scenes were really exciting and unpredictable until the very end. l think it's safe to say that I'll be reading everything that you write from this point on. My wife and I plan to read Love Without Limits together, I told her about the plot (and that it's a true stry) and she is in :)

loved it

really beautiful

5/5

Hoping for a sequal soon. amazing story

DARK EROTISM AT IT"S BEST

A lovely pulp detective story that is gritty, beautiful , badass storytelling with wonderful characters loved to the very end. Can't wait for the next part of this story..

Very well done

In this story I found many influences: Supernatural, the golden compass, Celestial matters and others that I don't recall now.

I read that you wanted to write a sequel, I'd suggest to be carefull with it because this storyline is concluded and magnificently so.
Hope to read more of your works soon.

Amazing!

Fantastic story! While totally erotic, it also kept me enraptured with the plot. I truly got wrapped up and attached to the character's lives. Absolutely fantastic.

Excellent Reading

Yes this is erotic but there is so much more, romance, conflict, heck the world.
I read to the end just to see how it all worked out!

Thanks for sharing your talents here - Highly recommended!

Thanks

Good story, thank you.

incredibly good

a great read. lots to think about, just fun to read and experience. well written. story similarity to another of my favorites but its natural with angel n demon themes.
thanks!

It was a good story, and could be great if you tightened up the plot a bit. There were a few beats that didn't ring genuine, such as when Zafira revealed that her purpose all along had been to get Cole to bind to her. You might want to revisit how that plays out. Also, it was a bit transparent that Frank was a villain. You might want to try some misdirection, make him more likable, etc.

Once you've cleaned and tightened, go for publication.

Top Five

One of the top five stories I have ever read on this great site...

HNNNNNG

Awesome read great characters very hot very captivating. Ending felt very rushed compared to everything else but otherwise i'd love to see more like this.

Great Read!

I have been looking for a story like this for a long time! Sexy plot, great story and morally conflicted characters. I hope you keep writing like this!

Great story. 5 stars. Please write more.

Please more. Please write more.

Man, what a great story. 5 stars!!! Great plot and story telling as well as erotic. Please continue writing more.

One of the best stories in this site. I hope you keep on writing. Thanks for the wonderful read.

Could not stop reading

Sure, I love story of succubus - the erotic couplings, etc... but most reads are just empty. Manyeyedhydra - I think that's his name, writes extremely well, and I did not think I'd find another author that could do so well. You certainly have, and it reads like a very good novel. This story could be re-written to a PG rating, it has that much content. But thankfully, for us succubus fans - we get the great story, and plenty of erotic visions! Thank you so much. I hope you will keep up writing in general, but another good succubus story would always be welcome. And really, this is a love story - not just a succubus story at all. I will probably start all over and read it again.

5 stars

Loved it! Perfect short story.

Scott

I liked your style so much. It remembers manyeyedhydra,and hell.... the story... it's just perfect.

Great story. One of the best. Thanks for giving us all this gift.

Dude where's my car

Loved the story, and gave it 5 stars. My only issue was Cole would drive to a place, then would use a portal to get home.

This was beyond awesome. The steamy parts were just the hook to a wonderful story in it's own right. I greatly enjoyed it and hope there's a sequel one day!

purely wat?

Simply put, INTRIGUING ! Best literotica have read for a long forgotten time!

Entertaining, intelligent, and arousing at the same time, not the usual fair. keep up the good work.

One if the best pieces I have read so far.

Great story!

You made us care for the characters, and teased us the whole way: when were Cole and Zafira finally going to fuck? And when they finally did, it fulfilled all expectations. Well done! :)

Wow

i started reading this story for one reason and stayed for another. This story has rivaled some of the well know author books that is published that I've read. You should seek that path. Post some of your work on Watt Pad..a lot of amateur authors get published from there. One minute they're story is available to read for free the next thing you know its taken down because its been published.

best read ever! can't wait for a part 2

At first I thought 19 pages was too long but it was worth every second (: my only complaint is that I saw frank being the murderer long before it was revealed however Cole and Zafira's cat and mouse game got me going at every encounter. Love their characters hope they'll definitely be bright back in the second story. Great work I never read anything better than this (: love how you portrayed Zafira!!

Awestruck!!

This is the first time I have bothered to comment on a story let alone go through 19 pages... This was worth every minute :) Just Awesome. Hope you make a part II...

Follow up

I read on your bio that you are planning to introduce some new main characters in the second part. Please don't do that. :( Let the main characters be Zafira and Cole please :(

IT WAS SO GOOOOOD

That was definitely worth the 19 pages man, it was so good!!! Your writing definitely made me fall in love with the characters and that takes some serious skill man. Hope you will continue sharing your skills here!(:

This story was amazing, I hope you're writing a part 2!!

thundrstruck!

They should make a movie out of this.......it is definitely infinitely better than twilight

amazing

I look forward too more... I may have fallen in love with the charecter though... So please add part two

☆ ☆ ☆ ☆ ☆ ☆

Worth more than 5 stars.. love your story.. already read this 3x and still loving it. Thanks for sharing it. 😄

Sinfully good

One bugaboo jumped out for me - twice used moral instead of mortal. But stellar tale. Read in one sitting. Many people felt bad about Penny. Me, too. But I also was sad about Stacy.

Amazing tale and very well told. And enjoyed.

Best Story Ever

Although with a few errors this was the best story in a lifetime. I have fallen in love with the characters and we would all love a Part 2. Thank you for this masterpeice because demons and succubi are awesome.

Awesomely wonderful.

Fell in love with Zafira.
Really lived the character myself.purely looking forward for the next sinful part of this.

I cried, I admit it.... Beautiful story!

Damn Son

Nice one should receive more views than 50 shades of grey