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Best Friend's Daughter Ch. 01

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by racfguy10/08/14

A good start...

I hope you continue the story. I'd like to see if our [unnamed] hero dumps the [unnamed] fiancée/nurse for the busty Sammy or if he just has a FWB in Sammy.

Suggestion: get someone to help with your grammar & punctuation, it would help your story flow better. Lit has several editors you could contact.

Please don't keep us waiting for the next chapter!

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by Anonymous10/08/14

Poorly written

Maybe a decent story in here somewhere, but the writing is so sloppy, I bailed. In fact, I stopped at the 'ragging' hard on.

Editor!

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by t_dawgg_1710/08/14

Punctuatuon

I apololgize about my spelling and grammar. On the next chapter I will use all my resources before submitting. I'm actually getting married this weekend so it may be next week for chapter 2. Sorry again but i'm glad some people like it.

Thanks,

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by woody123010/10/14

is this a true story????
not bad for first attempt.

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by t_dawgg_1710/13/14

True or not

Can't say its true. Some of it is but the erotic part of it is just my personal fantasy.

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by oldtwit02/18/15

Made me smile

This made me smile alright, lots of mens dreams , to short for me, but I did like it

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