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by Anonymous

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by Ashesh910/09/14

A crane of pristine white

Soars for me into the night ......!

Immortal lines , Tod :5-ed .

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by Magnetron10/15/14

I feel you could lose this

"to ponder a moment
in origami silence."

while capitalizing on the unintended rhyme that emerges.

I'm not really fond of the title. It lacks the originality that the poem itself exudes.

Definitely a 5.

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