The Perfect Massage

cliche, predictable, and rushed. This might have been better if you built some tension first.

Difficult to read

"I love it when you massage my ass." She said.

It should be:

"I love it when you massage my ass," she said.

Unreadable

If you are going to write, you should learn to spell. It would also help if you could use grammar and punctuation correctly.

an okay story, but...

Why does he fuck his mother up the ass? Nothing wrong with that, of course, as a change of pace or a novelty. But this is the first time the boy is fucking his mom. It's logical that he--and she--would want the first hot incestuous fuck to be the boy sticking his hot young cock up his mother's warm wet cunt, the same cunt he came out of. Ask any group of young motherfuckers, say your average Kevin, Sean, Bill and Josh, and I bet they'd all tell you the same thing. Nothing can ever compare with sliding their hard cock right up their own damn birth canal, the passageway they entered the world from. The boy tingles from his head to his toes, his body's on fire, his cock feels better to him than it's ever felt before and ever will again. And he's got the biggest grin of his life on his handsome face. A grin of pure pleasure and also of total triumph. He's doing what lots and lots of sons, who knows maybe every last one them, can only dream of doing as they whack off like pathetic assholes. He's fucking his own mother, pumping away like mad at that wonderful hairy hole between her legs and he ends up unloading his young balls and shooting his beloved mom a great big twatful of his creamy semen. That's what true motherfucking is all about.

it could have been a good story

but was really difficult to read.
"I used to do them a lot, since I was a kind and dad wasn't around."
btw, what kind are you?
and that round cubby ass of hers must be quite furry.

watching mom and dad

WHEN I WAS INN HIGH SCHOOL,ONE SUMMER AFTER I FINISHED CUTTING THE GRASS,AS I PASSED BY MY PARENTS BEDROOM WINDOW,I HEAR NOISES. SO I GOT UP AGAINST THE WALL,AND GLANCED INSIDE,AND BOY WHAT I SAW WAS SUCH A TURN ON. THERE WAS MOM AND DAD NAKED,MOM ON TOP,FACING AWAY FROM HIM AND TOWARDS THE WINDOW. SHE IS 6 FT BLONDE HAIR GREEN EYES NICE ROUND ASS,AND BIG BEAUTIFUL TITS,THAT JIGGLED WITH EVERY IMPALEMENT OF MY DADS SMALL PENIS. IT MAY HAVE BEEN SMALL BUT HIS SHAFT IS THICK. ANYWAY I GOT SO AROUSED WATCHING HER TITS FLOP UP AND DOWN AND SIDE TO SIDE. I UNZIPPED MY PANTS AND PULLED OUT MY PENIS AND BEGAN TO MASTERBATE TO WHAT I WAS WATCHING. ALL I COULD HERE WAS MOM SAYING OH GOD JOHN FUCK ME FUCK ME. ABOUT 20 LATER I HEARD MOM SAY I AM GONNA CUMM I AM GONNA CUMM. DAD SAID ME TO THEN UNEXPECTEDLYY I SAID OUT LOUD,ME TO,AND THEN MOM SAID I AM CUMMINNG DAD SAID ME TO I SAID ME TO AND WE ALL ERUPTED AND THE SAME TIME. BOY WAS THAT FUN,NOT TO MENTIONHOT