Why is this posted here? Are they married or even engaged? Do they have a relationship or is it a bar pick up? Seems to me this should have been an erotic coupling story
It is impossible to write a hot story in the second person. Utterly impossible. If you want people to read what you write, use the first or third person.
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Anonymous10/12/14
Pencil sketches will never match oil for color, richness, interest.....
....or value. They are merely suggestive shadows of a far more attractive reality or a far better representation of it on canvass.
So was this item as compared to reality or even real storytelling.
English
Paint drying is more interesting
This simply wasn't erotic.
Just writting...
This was just writting with no meaning.
My 2 Cents
Why is this posted here? Are they married or even engaged? Do they have a relationship or is it a bar pick up? Seems to me this should have been an erotic coupling story
A Helpful Hint
It is impossible to write a hot story in the second person. Utterly impossible. If you want people to read what you write, use the first or third person.
Pencil sketches will never match oil for color, richness, interest.....
....or value. They are merely suggestive shadows of a far more attractive reality or a far better representation of it on canvass.
So was this item as compared to reality or even real storytelling.
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