Fine stroke story . Usually this author goes for 2fer of bona fide characters. It got a little claustrophobic with only two exploring a heavy dynamic and craziness ensued. I greedily wanted mom to explore her fledgling praying mantis aspect and son to challenge this mom 'fatale 'on multiple levels. Kathleen Turner circa late nineties popped in mind as mom, maybe Cybill Sheppard.
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Anonymous10/12/14
1 week 2 soon
I think you should have waited another week for that editor!
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Anonymous10/23/14
below average
not so well describe. seems the story in a hurry to end
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Anonymous02/19/15
So hot!
I loveeeeed the mother and son tension and how rough they got. Would've been nice to see maybe some hair pulling, choking, slapping, etc but still was great. Only thing I didn't like was the lack of describing the orgasm. That's always my favorite part of the story. But it lead up to It then it said they were laying next to each other. Great idea for writing though and you did a good job other than that. :-) I couldn't help but wish I was in her position!
English
Comeuppance avoided ... kind of
Fine stroke story . Usually this author goes for 2fer of bona fide characters. It got a little claustrophobic with only two exploring a heavy dynamic and craziness ensued. I greedily wanted mom to explore her fledgling praying mantis aspect and son to challenge this mom 'fatale 'on multiple levels. Kathleen Turner circa late nineties popped in mind as mom, maybe Cybill Sheppard.
1 week 2 soon
I think you should have waited another week for that editor!
below average
not so well describe. seems the story in a hurry to end
So hot!
I loveeeeed the mother and son tension and how rough they got. Would've been nice to see maybe some hair pulling, choking, slapping, etc but still was great. Only thing I didn't like was the lack of describing the orgasm. That's always my favorite part of the story. But it lead up to It then it said they were laying next to each other. Great idea for writing though and you did a good job other than that. :-) I couldn't help but wish I was in her position!
rage and violence
are not erotic
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