Halloween Party Reunion

DG Hear is sticking to his formula

It's his 36,000,000 RAAC story. Not matter what she does or the cost that has to be paid. No matter the number of men, the number of kids that aren't his. They will always stay together.

Almost stopped reading.....

After the first few paragraphs. Rugby is not an NCAA sport. It is club sport and there are no scholarships given by Ivy League schools. Guys in their mid twenties don't make detective. And a detective standing around watching his wife get fucked is too much to believe. Anna had to know who did the crime. 3*

Who will be first?

Who will be the first author on story collections (plural) who will write such story where the betrayed husband does reconciliation with the cheating wife (for example for sake of the kids) but the husband leaves his ex cheating wife for a younger nicer woman after 5-10-15 years later??????????????????????

Duna

Why Not Stop Them?

Okay, she gave Dean a blow job, not good, but...

Now, he is obviously blackmailing her into sex.

Why not barge in, stop them and beat the crap out of him? She wasn't willingly cheating!

He sure as hell better not tell her

"It's odd that she never asked me if I killed Dean. I honestly don't know if I would tell her the truth."

Let's see, she doesn't have the emotional or general maturity to understand they don't have the money for a car. In a fit of anger, she borrows the money anyway. She allows herself to be blackmailed into sex. Of course she vows her love for her husband but she is too much of a fool to know what love or loyalty require.

Only a moron would possibly consider telling her he murdered someone and thereby putting his life in her extremely untrustworthy hands.

Further, as the story evolves, he told some lies about the loan to mislead the investigation. He then tells his dopey wife to go along with the tale. She now KNOWS that he lied, potentially exposing himself to charges. Everything he does that also includes her exposes him because she is not trustworthy, both about the murder and about his life.

BTW, he's pretty vicious. His past shows he was pretty morally loose in his past. With a little provocation, he now commits murder. Seems like the guy is a pretty nasty piece of work with a nice veneer of being a policeman to give him credibility. Not sure if we are supposed to like the guy or feel sorry for him but all the characters feel like a bunch of losers.

Dark Story

Didn't see the middle of this one coming. Kind of a tragedy - nobody won except possibly Anna - she didn't seem to care about her husband. Seems to me that this series of events would hang over this couple like a dark cloud for the rest of their lives. Interesting premise and well-written story.

Karen E has brought up a valid point

Why is it, and it's done often in these stories, that the guy never has the fortitude to stop his wife having sex. He could have stepped in and stopped it, but as always he watches and then acts. I can understand this reaction in a willing cuckold tale but there was no indication here that he enjoyed watching. I guess this is a normal plot for many authors. Story would have to go in another direction if he had done so, I suppose. Just wondering.
I don't know what to think of this story, for a policeman he's a coward and murderer, she's a cheater who can't be trusted. But, compared to some other stories posted today, it's acceptable.

Joe/John

You were too specific in naming him Joe at the start of the story, and then it was suddenly John. It's as if you didn't care about your own story. Give how the story played out only reinforced that opinion.

The bad thing is A LOT of policemen are exactly like this guy. They think they are above the law and sadly this tale is just a little too close to being absolutely truef!

Hi there, I'm DG

I get comments all the time that they always stay together. Well, I prefer happy ending but here are a few of my stories, where they didn’t. I just went through the d's. I would also like to add that it's hard to understand what one might do when faced with any given situation. You might think you would act one way but if it happens it's an instant decision you would have to make. Thank you for taking the time to read my stories and commenting, even if it's negative. All opinions are appreciated.
DG

A Double Standard 'Revisited'
A New Beginning
All About Getting Even
An Affair I'll Remember
Another Man's Wife Ch. 03
As Long As It Takes
Cheating Spouse
Coal Miner Pt. 01 They did get back together years later in ch. 5
Cold, Cold, Heart
Cruise Tickets
Dan's Life
Donating Blood

i like your writing

what i dont get is why he was letting his wife hang with his old friends. dean had told him he was going to fuck his wife, that shouldve been a warning. hell knowing what kind of asshole dean was their is no way he should not have seen this coming. after he left collage if he wanted a clean break he shouldve had nothing to do with them.

Well this was unfortunate.

I usually really like this authors stories but in this case I should have stopped reading when he named his son "Joey" (like a baby kangaroo) and then sent John to an Ivy league school only to use that education to enter the Police Academy. Bad choices and the harbinger to a bad story. What bothered me most were three things - why didn't he simply explain to his wife that he wasn't really friends with any of these people and that he didn't want to go to the reunion? Why did you make Meagan so dumb? Did it not occur to her to have a conversation with her husband about her concerns with his sexual history? And last but not least why didn't he simply stop Dean from fucking his wife? He's a cop for God's sake. Walk in, punch Dean, spank his wife and take her home? I was very happy to see your name under today's stories. Now I'm not so happy. Maybe next time?

I guess the moral of the story is...

being honest about your past with your spouse; you never know when the past will come back to bite you.

You know, this is why I really like DG Hear's stories, as there IS usually a moral or some sort of lesson to be learned. Even if the characters are flawed, or even if the story has some slight technical errors, his body of work is filled with easy-to-read lessons to be learned about average folks, in small town America.

KarenE DOES have a point.....Why didn't he stop the sex? He did seem to have the ability to intervene, but I think that the usual excuse applies here. He needed to see how far she would go, he needed to learn if it was the only time, or if it would continue. He needed to see her reactions to it. Believe it or not, I think that seeing her reactions to it actually helped him stay with her and endure it. She DID try to stop it at first, she WAS immediately remorseful. He DID learn that it was essentially the first and only time. She DIDN'T seem to be seeking it out or enjoying it TOO much. His biggest problem (perhaps BECAUSE of his past) wasn't the sex as much as her LIES and DENIALS about it, for months afterwards. Again, DG makes a point to say that in these cheating wife stories, it isn't the act of sex alone that makes up the majority of the betrayal, it really is more about the lies and deceit, and lack of respect that surround and follow the extramarital sex.

With all due respect to KarenE and JasonH, MY bigger question would have been, why didn't he put his foot down about attending this party in the first place? He didn't want to go, he didn't want to reconnect with these people, he didn't want to get a costume. He should have explained his feelings, even if that became the time to fess up about his past. But it would have proved his point about KEEPING the past in the past! The narrative excuse is that SHE got excited, because she didn't have a lot of friends and they didn't have much of a social life. He could have countered that argument by explaining that these weren't the type of friends to have, and resolved to spend more time taking her out and doing special things romantically together.

Of course, as always, if he had done all that, there wouldn't be a story. DG Hear is great, because at the exact point in the story where doing something different would have changed the entire outcome, it ALWAYS points the way for the reader towards the clearly defined lesson in which something can be learned from.

Thanks DG, as always, ALL of your efforts here are appreciated. It was really cool to see something new from you. If folks have a problem with this depiction of a fictional murder, all I have to say to them is: HEY relax, it was just a Halloween themed story!

Thanks again, can't wait for the next!

The moral of the story....

For me the moral of this story is: "Never fuck a police's wife, or you are death!"

Pathetic as usual!

Why expect anything good from this writer. The husband is a clueless loser and the wife is a mindless Cunt who will continue to fuck anyone with money. No loving wife here.

Investigation

Wouldn't the police have done some DNA work on the victim? Seems that finding a good place to look wouldn't have been too difficult.

What a filthy piece of shit cuck!

You could tell he was a cop. He protected his wife just like they protect us... Not!

Dean got what he deserved.

And Megan probably suspects that John may have done it, but will never want to know for sure.

Okay that was pretty good but...

it seems to me that she got off on the cheating and was hot to get fucked by her husband after watching the blowjob video. So, she will want that high again and cheating the second time will be easier for her. it's just a thought.

I also see him always having doubts about her. But if he is still getting all the sex he needs from his whore wife, then he might just consciously want to stay clueless.

I usually hate it when the husband stays with the wife, but I can see it happening here. Thanks for the story.

Fantasy land,

Is the location on your bio and that is certainly where this story takes place. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and say you were aiming for humour when you said the hero got a scholarship to an Ivy League university to play rugby league. A game only played in two states of Australia, the north of England, a couple of provinces in the south of France, PNG and a few rugby union refugees in New Zealand. It's a game more generally associated with tattoo parlours and minor criminal activity than top class universities.
Then we have the investigation into the murder, are the police really that dumb? Anyway putting that to one side it was a okay story that was well written and like many of theses tales if only the couple had talked to each other it could have been very different. 3*

Mistaken name

I'm DG and I apoligize for the name change in the story from Joe to John. I sent in an edit to have it corrected. Not worried about the contest. We all know this story won't be in any running but the story will be on site for a long time. No use in waiting to make the changes until the contest is over. Thank you for all the comment both good and not so good, haha. I write what I feel. I have many who follow my stories and others that read them and constantly knock them. I don't know why you would continually read them if you dislike them so much but you are welcome.
with respect
DG Hear

Enthralling tale

Basically a living nightmare. The Joe Friday like narrative makes you wonder.
I am guess that if he was not afraid of getting on the police radar that he would not have stayed with Megan.

Erotic ???

Doesn't this story belong in Non-Erotic?

I don't see what is supposed to be so erotic about blackmail and murder, which are the key plot elements of this story.

And the "hero" of the story... first he watches his wife being blackmailed into having sex and does NOTHING to stop it. Then he gets really ANGRY... so angry he commits a brutal murder, leaving his wife's DNA evidence very obviously at the scene, though he's a detective, so you might think he would understand how damning that evidence would be.

But fortunately all the other detectives investigating the murder are so stupid they can't find this obvious evidence.

So we are left with a super-sexy, very erotic love story... If only he would have murdered everyone at the party, chopped all their heads off and put them on stakes. THAT would have been super-erotic.

Far Fetched

Yes a bit far fetched but so are most drama programmes we watch on television, not quite up to the writers usual standard but a good enough yarn. A wise man would not have agreed to go to reunion but then we would not have a story to read, I have avoided similar situations many times in years past, in the construction industry your place of work and those you are working with is constantly changing, after six or sometimes two years. I would go to the pub for a drink and a game of darts but would never attend any gathering with my wife simply because of the attitude some men have towards women, I emphasise only some men.

Great story the wifes brians very questionable

Great story, however, one question for thought, if while the couple in the center of the story were dating, both were completely honest with each other, no other side pots ( to speak of) and married the same way, still faithful? WHAT THE HELL DOES IT MATTER WHAT EACH DID BEFORE EACH OTHER? WHO THE FUCK CARES, WE ALL HAVE HISTORIES, AND THAT IS IT HISTORY. Did either play on any emotions of cheating on each other at anytime? NO, so why settle on revenge on his past by 1. borrowing money from a man that would take sex in trade, and 2. cheat with the idea that your husbands past was something he should have told you? Grow the fuck up.

I stopped reading when the author failed to explain why the detective

Went to an Ivy League university on a full ride but joined the police academy. These people don't become cops, they move into politics or business or become DA's, not regular beat cops and finally detectives.

Also, the wife isnt naive, she's a fucking retard! I'm surprised she can walk and chew gum. Next time, don't try so hard to make your characters for the story, let your character write the story.

WHATS A GUILTY COP TO DO

the tight rope gets more flimsy daily. TK U MLJ LV NV

Lacks any sign of human emotion.

Why would he calmly let Dean fuck his wife then kill Dean? Clearly it wasn't in a fit of rage because the "hero" was an emotionless lump.

Bad. Just bad.

The story is rather dull

No emotion to it. Why kill the friend, but not the wife? Both are equally responsible for adultery.

One star

Sorry, Didn't like the story. John does not and could not love Megan and pull the crap he did pull. That ain't ego... that is plain and simple sadism and I have absolutely no use for sadists.

Major nitwit:

Stands by and watches his 'friend' screw his wife!

Besides being bull, dull and FULL of holes,.............. I HATE CUCKS!

'nuff said.

Don't know how JOE Friday became John later in the story

????

He watched....

Well, he had to see if dhe was going to cheat or not, barging in eould only stop one event and then leave nagging doubts from then on. Nice murder plot, worthy of CSI.

confusion

you got very confused over what Megan had told you about where she got the money. Megan sounds as though she was not very bright so may have been confused as she told you she got an advance from her boss-----

but hey,thanks for taking the time to write it.

Meh

a little sloppy at times. The rash of violent stories lately is a bit disturbing. Thanks for the offering.

Rash of violent stories?

This is Halloween horror story season, grab a brain moron.

hey dg

i did a reread and something struck me. dean's wife had to know who killed her husband.she was the one that set up meagan for dean. she had to know that dean had got some from her and was planning on more. it would be to much of a coincidence that dean gets killed right after that. i bet if the police ever got around to charging her she would spill it. for anyone asking why she wouldnt tell to start. she would be accusing a cop who already showed he would kill .i bet she was scared. you should write a sequel were anna needs something from them.

He fucked another man's wife, and her husband killed him.

Works for me

There should be a lot more LW stories like this

Thanks DGH

Unbelievably Bad! Who Wrote This Really?

There are no rugby scholarships at Ivy League Collages, or in this country.
Ivy League grads don't join the police academy and become patrolmen "beat" cops, or even detectives (can you say overqualified)?
Then we're supposed to believe this over educated wimp killed the slut wife's lover and then didn't have the balls to kick her to the curb?
I've read (and enjoyed) most of your stuff, and I gotta say this is the worst piece garbage ever.

Glad you are back!

Thanks for the good reads over the years DG. This one was a fine Halloween tale. These tales are usually lighter, and though I was surprised to see a murder, it is in keeping with the spirit of the holiday and mysteries in general. I was concerned about Megan seeing 'Dean' the night of the reunion/party. She danced with him and confessed to him her past two boyfriends after he badgered her about how many dicks have been in her pussy. The detectives put the time of death to the night before the party. Megan should have known that she had indeed talked to her husband because of the nature of the questioning. Therefore she knew the identity of the killer to be her husband! Its a small quibble but does not take away the fun of the story. Thanks for the memories. 5 stars

Insipid nonsense

A new low even for you DG, banal drivel that was physically painful to read - 1 star

Wow

Hell of a tale. Seems like a big contradiction from one angle. I still see it as a great tale, just not a typical tale. I can stop here or write another thousand words. I'll just stop and give it five stars.

The Bottom Line

The bottom line is that she is a cheater and she has some serious emotional/psychological problems. She sucked and fucked because she was angry because of what other people said about her husband previous sexual activity? Activity that was clearly prior to their even meeting? Or she cheated for $600 which makes her a common whore? Either way, she is a cheater. Of course they have young children but that factor is never brought into play. That might be a reason to stay. The thinking here is muddled. The explanation for what happened is meaningless. His acceptance and forgiveness seems to be based on his lack of concern, yet he killed a man over it? Contradictory, confusing, ugh tiring.

Strictly tripe.

Bottom line is she is a cheating slut. And, he is a candy ass for letting her make him into a cluck wimp.

Good basic idea

poor story framework. This could have been done much better.

It was a good story

Yes, sometimes there was a stretch, but everyone must remember that this excellent writer has given us some wonderful experiences. John sure put Megan through the wringer after he found out about her unfaithfulness, didn't he?

Glad to see you back in LW...

... and, for what it's worth, I thought it was a pretty good story. Was it your best? No, probably not, but I'll just say this one stood head and shoulders above about 90% of what has been submitted in this category lately. I realize that a lot of these critics don't get you but, for those of us that do, hang in there. Trust me, you've been missed.

Another day...

...another story of murder in the Loving Wives section. I know it's a Halloween story, and tales of murderous psychopaths can make for a great horror tale. I just don't understand why so many authors insist on putting these stories in this section.

This story was so poorly written, it was difficult to read. I'm sorry to say it wasn't worth the effort.

to swingerjoe

Huge piece of shit, every bitch that you write should be killed.
5 solid and wonderful *